Reviews for Möbius
Eiya Weathes chapter 1 . 4/7/2011
I like how you started this piece by taking the reader to this mystical place. It really hooked me in.

Now the ending, it definitely wasn't what I expected. I love how you ended it. It's just beautiful in an eerie way. Wow, just wow. Kudos to you on this piece!
JaffaFoose chapter 1 . 4/7/2011
Narq chapter 1 . 4/7/2011
Here in this whiteness there are no walls, no doors, no edges.

- i like how the beginning makes me think. Where is this place? White makes me think hospital, but when you say no walls ect, I think, a place in the mind?

There is a place for your feet to walk across, and nothing else.

-Consider substituting something for "a place" feels a bit casual for your normally well thoughtout phrases.

Now stop reading and look to your left.

Yes. You. Until your mind is as empty as the White Infinite, look to your left.

- okay, I must admit, I had to stop my eyes from dragging to the left of my screen.

Right. Have read to the end, I must say that it makes me shiver a bit. Unexpected, really, but also a bit deep.

Good luck in the WCC too!

Poisoned Twinkles chapter 1 . 4/6/2011
One word: Whoah. I did not expect the ending. Eerily beautiful.
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