|Reviews for My Neighbor's a Vampire|
| slave to the voices chapter 3 . 5/11/2011
Another good chapter. Not a lot of action so far, but you're doing a good job of keeping me on the line with some very nice character building. I'm already growing to like Max and I'm curious to see how he deals with the neighbors.
Keep up the good work!
| slave to the voices chapter 2 . 4/20/2011
In the third paragraph, you're missing a couple of 'be's, but other than that, I thought this was a good chapter. Your descriptions of the neighbors were great.
Nice work, looking forward to more.
| slave to the voices chapter 1 . 4/11/2011
Let me start by saying I hope you take this the way it's mean to be. I don't like to bash, I offer my opinion to help you better yourself as a writer. I noticed some minor grammar errors (mostly left out commas). Some of your sentences seem to run on a bit, which slows the flow of the read. Finally, I think you could cut the word count by at least 50 by removing unnecessary words. I see promise in your work which is why I took the time to give an honest review instead of just saying "cool story!".
I wish you luck with this and everything you write.
| Jen H.M chapter 1 . 4/11/2011
Very funny and relatable so far. Can't wait for the next chapter.