Reviews for i m a g e s
anachronistic chapter 9 . 5/30/2011
brotip: always choose the second answer. unless it's a ridiculous answer.

i like how simple it is. & it is very simple, but gets the message across perfectly. nice work.
jack0of0spades chapter 6 . 5/27/2011
Ooh, I like this one too. It feels just a little bit awkward to me, though. As always, you make a captivating rhythm. I could feel this one tripping over itself to come out, which is exactly what it should to get the emotion across. I just kinda wonder about the lines "the sun rises on a cold day/ and it's not even warm". The rest of your pieces are very compact and powerful, but those two lines kind of threw me. Maybe it's just me.
jack0of0spades chapter 5 . 5/27/2011
Wow. Just wow. Your opening image just sets this off, and again, your attention to punctuation and form just make this piece powerful. I'm sure you've thought of it, but it struck me the the first line might want a punctuation mark at the end. It closes off the flow a little bit, but I've always been a believer that poems should be able to read as complete, grammatical thoughts that just happen to be too beautiful to be written normally. Terrific poem though...
jack0of0spades chapter 2 . 5/27/2011
Haven't even gotten to your most recent one, but this poem is beautiful. I like how you used your formatting to accentuate what you were trying to say, and your title is perfect. Great job!
anachronistic chapter 8 . 5/25/2011
wrong form of "it's" there - it should be "its"

but besides that, i like this. it's kind of wistful or something.
young and the reckless chapter 7 . 5/24/2011
i really like this piece.

the out of this world theme works nicely.
young and the reckless chapter 2 . 5/24/2011
this is abosultely lovely.

"i found her outside like a willow tree with no leaves"

my favorite line.
anachronistic chapter 7 . 5/23/2011
oh my god i love that last line. it is gorgeous.

actually this in general is like, fucking asdfghjkl;;;;;

so many allusions, too

1 to you, darling
anachronistic chapter 6 . 5/23/2011
the wordsalltogether gives off a very rushed & hectic & scared feeling

that's what you're going for, right?
sordid sorbet chapter 6 . 5/12/2011
fp is undergoing maintenance

i am going through anonescence

this is poetic

and pretty

i like it
anachronistic chapter 5 . 4/25/2011
clever wordplay; this evokes lovely emotions.
anachronistic chapter 4 . 4/25/2011
anachronistic chapter 3 . 4/17/2011
it's funny, 'cause there

was so much detail

and . . . a lot of emotion

and life

and much like life itself,

it ended with

"and then we died"

and then it all ended; self-

demonstration, if you will.
anachronistic chapter 2 . 4/17/2011
this makes me think.
anachronistic chapter 1 . 4/17/2011
hm. i haven't seen you rhyme in a while. this is good. very colorful imagery.
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