Cool, can't wait for the next chapter

Her roots were dyed red? Do you mean the tips are? :)

Very good start to the story, I like it so far :) Good luck with all of the characters. I have a hard time myself with more than a few at a time, especially all at once. It's just hard to keep up with lol.

But anyway, keep up the good work :) I'm looking forward to reading more!

Great job with the edit. Don't worry about the length, first chapters should be pretty short anyway.

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Well, the idea is really good, but the first chapter is written in a way that I wouldn't start a story. Usually you would let the readers see how things are done with a holiday/their traditions/beliefs in a prologue. And instead of having a list of friends and/or people and how they relate to each other, it would be better to write the story and show that way, how the characters interact. I believe that having so many characters may be a little hard for you to deal with, so you may want to stick with a few and make the others secondary characters. Other than that, it sounds interesting.

Its a short intro, but I am glad you posted. You have alot of characters listed. I will recomend now to avoid placing too many characters into your story right from the begginning when you post the next installment. I wish you luck though. I can't wait to read the first chapter. -pj