|Reviews for This I Believe: He Took My Crayon!|
| PJ Draft chapter 1 . 5/12/2011
The child I tutor brought a 'this I believe' essay prompt like this. :) since I'm clueless and wanted to see some examples and yours was one of the more recent and interesting pieces Fp search led me to. I like the idea of this, however, the repeating at the beginning was kind of off-putting, I'm curious if maybe it was a requirement when you wrote it or just an artistic choice. Anyways, just thought I should drop my thoughts since I read.
| Fira Dawnce chapter 1 . 5/7/2011
Wonderful. Mainly wonderful.
However, it would be good to not start almost every paragraph with "Have you ever..." It makes it kind of repetitive.