Reviews for Love, life death and heaven
Angelis Kate chapter 1 . 4/24/2011
It's an interesting story! :)

I think you need to look at the flow of your paragraphs;

i.e. where you have "You might think that dyeing your hair electric pink looks, (she takes a deep sigh) cool, however this school has a reputation to up keep!"The plain dull woman replies.

in Chapter one.

What about this:

"You might think that dyeing your hair electric pink looks..." the dull woman took a moment to consider the polite word, "...cool. However, this school has a reputation to up keep!"

What do you think?

BTW I would love if you could RTF ;)

-Ange
asklefjaeihog chapter 1 . 4/18/2011
Oh. Interesting. Keep on ;)