|Reviews for Love, life death and heaven|
| Angelis Kate chapter 1 . 4/24/2011
It's an interesting story! :)
I think you need to look at the flow of your paragraphs;
i.e. where you have "You might think that dyeing your hair electric pink looks, (she takes a deep sigh) cool, however this school has a reputation to up keep!"The plain dull woman replies.
in Chapter one.
What about this:
"You might think that dyeing your hair electric pink looks..." the dull woman took a moment to consider the polite word, "...cool. However, this school has a reputation to up keep!"
What do you think?
BTW I would love if you could RTF ;)
| asklefjaeihog chapter 1 . 4/18/2011
Oh. Interesting. Keep on ;)