|Reviews for The Garden|
| LilMaria chapter 1 . 4/28/2011
This was a really good start! I really felt the emotions behind your wordings!
Very creative thought seeing as your writing a near overused topic of abusive relationships. I really think you have made it your own and it's great.
One small thing, in the beginning of some of your paragraphs, the first word isn't capitalized. It's really small, and I make that mistake a lot. But these are things we need to finesse.
Can't wait to read more! And I can't wait to read more of your work!
Peace and Love!
| Eliot Pierre chapter 1 . 4/28/2011
Whoa, my first time reading this kind of story, and it's quite interesting. I know the story's gonna be dark and depressing, but I still hope for a nice development.
You do tend to keep switching tenses though. And I usually find some odd paragraph breaks in between. But these are minor things, as these didn't ruin the mood of the story.
That's all I can say I guess. I'll be watching out for more updates.