Reviews for The Observation
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 6/4/2011
I really love the first three lines. The image is really great of beauty being etched on a face. The word choice was really great there too with "etched" and "delicate" and "downcast."

One part though "mostly unrelated" kinda through me off because the next part is a but as in a different thing. When you said mostly unrelated I kinda expected the second part to be a comparison...

Still that last line was really great and beautiful.

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lymli chapter 1 . 5/10/2011
wow, that's deep
Archia chapter 1 . 5/7/2011
I loved the two words 'delicate beauty' to me they speak a beauty that's far more than their meaning. Talking about the meaning, I loved the whole meaning of this. Keep it up!
Melanie Layugan chapter 1 . 5/1/2011
Wow! That just took my breath away. You go girl!
Random-Idiocity chapter 1 . 4/30/2011
Nicely done. Keep it Up!
nickyO chapter 1 . 4/30/2011
If I knew artwork better, I'd say this poem was inspired by an observation about a particular art subject, like maybe Judas in the Last Supper but more than likely one of the "bad" women of the bible.

Am I close or way, way off the mark?
Punslinger chapter 1 . 4/29/2011
This is an excellent blend of subtle phrasing and psychological insight. Very impressive.