Reviews for Book 1: Attachments Chapter 3: One of Us
disrhythmic chapter 5 . 7/30/2011
Iiiiiiiiiiit's Dizzy!

...what, this? Nothing. -tosses ax in a corner-

Anyway. What can I say besides WHOA. So many twists... This was great. I like the bits of comedic relief to break up all the crazy plotting and action. I also -really- enjoy the depth of all your characters... the bad guys aren't just driven by greed and the good guys have their dark sides as well. It's refreshing to see.

Two typos I wanted to point out real quick, both in Ch. 3:

-“David looked from the book that he was about to shelve and shared at all of them in confusion” I think you mean 'stared'.

-"Do you want that on your conscious?” Should be 'conscience'. :)

Off to the next! Can't wait.