Reviews for Exhausted
YasuRan chapter 1 . 5/15/2011
I like the imagery of an old battered body who relies on a cane to get around. It can symbolize many situations. The use of second-person POV draws the reader in nicely and helps me identify with what the narrator's going through. I also like how the narrator seems to sink in despair as seen through the descriptions of her weakening body and lungs. Again, great imagery. Ending the poem with a question adds to the desperate tone. In an odd way, it works that there is no closure for the narrator since it has the reader wondering what happens next.

Nice job.
BedHead-RedHead chapter 1 . 5/3/2011
powerful stuff! love the imagery of the walking stick and the exhausting path going up that unclimbable mountain...It really spoke to me!

BedHead
WonderfullyWanderingAlone chapter 1 . 5/3/2011
I like this. I like the question at the end. I think it really speaks for the whole poem in itself :D