Well, I'm hooked. This isn't really the sort of thing I usually read, but I enjoy your other stuff so much that I had to try it. I'm very glad I did.

You wanted to know if you had enough description, etc., and I think you do. I think you've got the right balance of narrative, exposition, and dialogue. I feel like I'm learning about the characters at just the right speed. You may be a little light on physical descriptions of the characters, but I, personally, like that. I don't think there's any need to describe characters down to the tiniest detail - it's nice to have something left to my own imagination.

I look forward to reading more. I might even sign up for a fictionpress account just to get alerts...

GAH! really! you had to cut it off there? i love the quick updates and everything, i just wish there was more. i can't wait for the next part!

Oh gosh, this was great! Akira spilled the beans! And it sounds like Zane was expecting it. Does his father see ghosts too? Oh, but that was touching at the end. I kinda saw Zane being sad, but now Zane and Akira have a sort of connection that will hopefully bring them closer. I was curious at first if Zane could see ghosts but was just really good at pretending not to notice them, but he wouldn't ignore Dillon. That makes me wonder if Dillon could have a conversation with Zane through Akira...oh! Is that how he'll "find peace." Hmm...maybe he'll see the light if he could communicate with his mom. Ohhh, I'm excited. Great writing, amazing plot development, great chapter!

OMG how could you end it like that! please update soon! this story is getting so interesting, i can't wait to read more. still would like a better mental picture on what everyone looks like, but love how the characters interact! Dillion is so cute, acting like a 5 year old or something! hope there's another chapter soon!

Yay, new chapter! lol, i'm seeing a lot of Eureka and now Alice in Wonderland influences here. i loved the line "six impossible things before breakfast". This is just such an awesome story and i hope you update again soon. the family in the house she just rented is going to be so funny, and dillion sounds adorable. the only thing i'm wondering about is what the characters look like. you haven't really given a physical description of Akira or Zane in this yet so i can't really picture them. anyway, looking forward to what happens next!

Oh, this is so good! And it's great how you're developing more of Akira, too! I'm glad she got that house and the car, it's exciting to see she's not running away from ghosts. And Tassamara sounds like the perfect setting for this story. I also can't wait to see more of Zane and figure out what Akira's going to do for GD! This is a great story so far. You're writing style especially is very balanced between the characters' thoughts, emotions, speech and actions. I'm looking forward to more!