Reviews for A Gift of Ghosts
AllyrienDM chapter 23 . 10/4/2011
That's very sweet, and very sad. Nice chapter!
AllyrienDM chapter 22 . 10/3/2011
Not bad, but I think maybe I would fluff up the bits about Akira & Zane that you were interspersing with Grace's research. The way you wrote them, it started to feel like I was going over a checklist. Less connection with the characters this way. What I *did* like was the conversations and quotations you included. They spiced it up more (and they were, of course, also rather witty). Anyways, too bad about Henry. He seemed sweet.
Amy chapter 22 . 10/3/2011
This felt a bit like a montage, if I were watching it rather than reading it. Not sure if that's what you were going for, but it certainly didn't confuse me. It's a nice way to make time go by and show a lot without saying much.

The only thing that did confuse me was when Akira and Zane are lying in the heat. You don't mention that they're inside on the bed at first, and so I immediately assumed they were on the porch or something, until you mentioned Zane looking for his clothes. Other than that, I liked it. Well, except for Henry fading, of course. How sad :(
Sara chapter 21 . 10/2/2011
this was an interesting chapter. I love the fact that Akira was asleep when Zane called and i wonder what she said. The breakfast with the family was so awkward and hilarious! I can't wait to read more!
Amy chapter 21 . 10/2/2011
Thank you, thank you, thank you for making Zane call. And soon. That was lovely. And his looks and hints... delicious. Gotta be honest, I'm kinda hoping to read how they pass the time ;)

I'm guessing the talk between Lucas and Dillon might be a little emotionally tense. I'm curious to hear what Lucas has to say, and how he handles the chance to talk to his son. Not sure if you plan on showing that side of the conversation, or not, but I wouldn't mind seeing it. Anyway, thanks for the update! Look forward to more, as usual.
AllyrienDM chapter 21 . 10/2/2011
Oh, boy. The whole family gathered in one place. Poor Akira! But I'm glad she and Zane are enjoying themselves anyways.
Amy chapter 20 . 9/28/2011
Awww... Zane being cute with gifts. Poor Akira, she really has no clue, lol. Interesting that Dillon, who worried about Zane hurting Akira, is now telling her that he'll be back.

Glad to get a little more info on the ghosts, again, though only enough to make me want more. :) I am enjoying the slow discovery, along with Akira, of the world of these ghosts and how they operate. I'll be patiently waiting until after the weekend to get more :)
Sara chapter 20 . 9/27/2011
lol, ah schoolwork, the bane of every student's existence. I'm glad i'm not the only one drowning in work though. Anyway, as for the real point of this post, love the chapter. Sorry to hear Zane's mom might be murderous (ah alliteration, lol) but Zane seemed to be a bit of a jerk, just being all distant. Poor Akira, getting a kindle and all. Love how you described the different time periods between the ghosts though, that was a neat tidbit. anyway, looking forward to whatever you post next!
AllyrienDM chapter 20 . 9/27/2011
Hmmmm...looking forward to seeing how Zane copes. :)
ZeroGain chapter 19 . 9/26/2011
Well it's certainly interesting that you choose this moment to switch POVs :)

I like the energy the change gives to this. It's a great time to have an insight into how Zane thinks and what he wants. I think it might be crucial toward getting him into being more than good in bed.

I can see where writing this would be hard. You almost had to have written it from Akira's POV first, just so you could get Dillon's lines down, because it feels like a good one-sided conversation ought to, even down to the whole snapping back to the ghost's focus causes pain.

That said, if he's in pain it feels like that was extremely transitory right about the "aura" vs. "halo" line. I want there to be a bigger argument about this, maybe even a desperate moment when he decides to stretch even farther to defy Akira and see his mom. (Perhaps in a future chapter or scene?)

Even so, this is great. I like Zane's thoughts in this, and he has a suitable distress over the idea of his mom being a "killer ghost", as well as suitable disbelief. I look forward to seeing how this argument evolves.

And thanks again for some lunchtime reading! :)
Sara chapter 19 . 9/26/2011
oh wow. that was an interesting twist. i love how this is from Zane's POV and that he's so confused while Akira is talking to Dillon. That and the fact that he was pouting over being ignored in favor of his dead nephew, lol. i'm kind of upset at his ideas of casual dating though. I mean yeesh, how much of a jerk could you be "when we were both bored just continue on as friends"...yeah, ok. anyway, love the chapter and looking forward to the next one!
Amy chapter 19 . 9/26/2011
Glad we got to go back to Zane's pov for this chapter. My favorite line is probably an odd one, but it's Zane's "What do you need?" It's much more personal and caring to me than a simple, "What's wrong?" I liked that. I also liked his frustration at not knowing what was going on and not having all of the info because Akira won't tell him. I'm almost afraid it's going to get him into trouble because he won't know something he should.

I'm very curious to learn more about Zane's mother. This is getting very interesting.
Amy chapter 18 . 9/26/2011
Read this two days ago, but haven't had a chance to review. I really liked this chapter. I liked the musings of Akira. I love that Zane has started researching Ghosts. I think it feels very sweet. And I really love the description of the house. It instantly made me feel uncertain and afraid. It was a very good mood-changer.

Now I'm off to read the next chapter. :)
AllyrienDM chapter 19 . 9/26/2011
Yikes, they need to work on their communication skills. Hahaha. Okay, well, this was a very exciting chapter and I look forward to seeing where things go!
ZeroGain chapter 18 . 9/25/2011
Write-and-let-go is your friend. This chapter is fantastic! There is a lot of development, and it flirts with being too expository (I hope I'm using that right), but when tied with the mystery in process and the slow, quiet revellations about her past, it's instead fulfilling and exciting. The ending is both mysterious and tense, and very well constructed. You are honing a talent for the chapter-by-chapter cliffhanger (or maybe hook?), but whatever we settle on calling it, it really reinforces the desire to turn the metaphorical page.

By the bye, you are improving nicely on narrative description (the passing of time).

Can't wait for the next chapter.
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