I really love this story so much! I can't wait to read more!

Hi, I'm still reading, still enjoying (especially since the chapters started coming thick and fast), just a little bogged down in RL and falling behind with the reviewing.

The only thing I spotted was the name error that ZeroGain mentioned. Really, this doesn't read like a quick and dirty draft; apart from that one mistake it seems pretty polished.

I don't know if it's the speed with which you're rattling off the chapters, or if it's just that the story's that good, but I'm starting to get a real sense of urgency about the story. I want to know what happens next...

Still can't believe you got another chapter up so quickly. And so cleanly, too. The only typo I saw was the same as the previous reviewer. There's nothing confusing, or difficult to read, it just flows.

You've got me really nervous for Akira now. I like, though, that she's worried about him lying to her, but she doesn't immediately believe it, given what she knows about him. Makes her much more realistic.

Great build-up and foreshadowing (like using the text messaging instead of talking, great shadings to Akira's doubt), and lots of really juicy introspection. I felt tense all the way through, and not really sure as to Zane's motives until the end, so excellent work there.

Only thing I see wrong is this line:

"No," Dillon continued. "The problem is – the thing is – see, what's happened is –,"

Shouldn't that be 'Zane continued'?

Also, when you reformat later I think this might work better as part of another chapter. Maybe.

Curious to see how this turns out! Also I should tell you that you have a typo - you switched Zane's named for Dillon once. Otherwise, all clear, and I'll be looking forward to the next chapter!

Can I just say "ditto" to Zero? Because I think he summed it up pretty well.

I was really surprised to see another chapter up so quickly, but I think the "write and let go" method suits you. It feels more...easy. If that makes any sense. It flowed very well and just had a lightness to it that's hard to explain. I hope this method is making you feel less in a funk, too.

Looking forward to more, as always. ~Amy

huh, you sure this is just a "write it and let it go" bit? it's really good for something you think is rough. Poor Akira, i really hope Zane didn't trick her or anything but at the same time it would make for some interesting drama. only thing i can think to mention on the negative side is that i wish you had mentioned their date or w/e it was the night before but other than that this was a great chapter. i'm very excited for the faster updates! lol, anyway, keep writing honey, you know i'll like w/e you come up with.

Oh, Akira. So untrusting. Betcha it hadn't even dawned on him as a possibility. Or, alternatively, as a problem. Hm. Well I'll be curious to see! I didn't catch any errors in the chapter, but sometimes my brain just edits straight over minor ones, so who knows. Looked great to me.

Another chapter so fast. You could call this "A Gift to Zero" :P

From the reading enjoyment perspective I really applaud your "write and let go" attitude. There's a more immediate feel to it, I think. Maybe that is just that this chapter is more in-the-moment than some of the others, but this feels close to the surface. (If that makes any sense, my similes and colloquialisms fail me.)

Regarding the story itself, my reaction the whole way through was "ooh, I'm intrigued" and especially the bit that you end this chapter with. Nice! I can feel Akira's frustration and hesitation, and I really want to see where this goes.

lol, poor Dillon. Love that Akira has anxiety after sleeping with someone but Zane is just too darn cute when he doesn't want her to leave! this was a great chapter and i'm looking forward to the next update!

This was very cute, especially Dillon's worry over Akira from his "knowledge" gleaned from tv, haha. And I'm glad Zane seems so interested to continue. I think I'd be a little weirded out at trying to maintain an intimate relationship in a house full of ghosts, though. :) Should be interesting. Thanks for the quick update!

Yay! A new chapter! And good for Zane not letting it get awkward - well, aside from Dillon's appearance which was of course inescapably awkward. So good :)

Fantastic chapter. I really like this post-coital conversation, and the job interruption is great, but the ghostly interruption is even better.

We don't achieve a whole lot of resolution to anything, but this is great staging for future material to build on. Be it Zane and his feelings for Akira, her anxieties, or Dillon's fears.

I'm calling Dillon's watching habits as "Desperate Housewives", am I right? Assuming I am, I laughed out loud at that. Absolutely great. From what i know of his past that you haven't shared yet, I think his fears may well be grounded elsewhere, but he's just the sort to be affected by that stimuli, especially if he's still thinking like teenager and considering how well he knows Zane.

Great story so far! :D

L.L.B

Hot! I love love love That Kiss, but this was fantastic. I've never really been a fan of physics. I know physics and chemistry are the foundations, but really, they're just numbers until you have biology. ;)

But this made me like physics just for a minute. I'm a little surprised by how aggressive Akira is. I loved it, but am interested in seeing the emotional results.

Also, I'd like to humbly nominate Amy Acker ( wiki/Amy_Acker) for the role of Akira.