Reviews for Bitten Vampire
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 16 . 4/24/2012
Good story!

I just have some things to say...

I don't really know what country you're from, so forgive me if I point out something that isn't a mistake...

Firstly, I think it needs a bit more details. I kind of felt what happened, but you may want to describe certain situations more.\

There are some places where you write in the present tense, but the rest is in past.

circumstances isn't spelled curcamstances... but I may be wrong... I'd check, but I don't want to check every country's spelling of the word.

Around two-thirds of the way through the book, there were some paragraphs that were there twice.

You may also want to establish more of a connection between the readers and the characters in the book.

To fix these mistakes, you may want to re-read chapters before you post them.

finally, the ending was nice, but it could have been less abrupt.

I'm sorry if I come across as a bitch from this review. I've just read so many stories that I pick up on a lot of stuff...

Tarah xXx
Sweetest Demon chapter 1 . 11/3/2011
the chapter is pretty quick and jumpy, but its good i really enjoyed reading it :)
le-emo-kid-775 chapter 12 . 9/22/2011
the chap is ok i think john harrison should be younger though and you keep repaeting th sentences be careful and watch your grammer
Dana chapter 16 . 9/18/2011
I loved your story! You're a really good writer. I'll love to read more from you.
Claudia Elaine Cargile chapter 16 . 9/11/2011
WOW! I Love Your Book! I Love ALL The Chapters! You Should Definately Write A Sequel To This! I Can't Wait To Find Out What Happens Next! Luv It!

ClAwDoG ClAwDiZzLe
The Deadly Fang chapter 1 . 9/7/2011
Wow! The first chapter is just fantastic I have to say. Your excellent at character descriptions I can perfectly imagine everything that's going on. Poor Aubry must be so confused... How did she get turned in to a vampire? :o lol ... I guess I'll just read and find out :)
CrystalGW34 chapter 16 . 9/7/2011
Congratulations on finishing your story. So many people on here never do. Glad that John Harrison is dead and everyone is happy and healthy. I hope you do a sequel, but if not then I look forward to reading what ever else you write. Thanks for sharing your story. :)
CrystalGW34 chapter 15 . 9/5/2011
The best chapter yet. It was just the right amount of suspense and action. I would read a sequel if you decided to write it. Update again soon. :)
CrystalGW34 chapter 14 . 9/1/2011
I can understand why she doesn't want to eat, but she should. If she wants to make her escape she's going to need her strength. Can't wait to read more. :)
CrystalGW34 chapter 13 . 9/1/2011
So he lied and her mom isn't in the house. I have to read more, so I'm going to keep this review short so I can get onto the next chapter. Loved this. :)
CrystalGW34 chapter 12 . 8/30/2011
Sorry I didn't review sooner. I've been busy lately. You know what that's like. Anyway, I have to say this is one of my favorite chapters. I can't wait to see what happens next to her and her mother. Please update soon, but no pressure. I'm not going anywhere. :)
cutie chapter 7 . 8/21/2011
this book sucks
Naureen chapter 2 . 8/19/2011
hmm...good story, thought I've only read the first two chapters. Don't worry, I'll finish when I have time. I love the name Erin, it is so cute! You should publish more stories, and definitely a story with wizard/witches. please, please, please?
CrystalGW34 chapter 11 . 8/13/2011
What? He wants her to be his wife. That's freaky. Please update again just as soon as you can. I can't wait to read more. :)
CrystalGW34 chapter 10 . 8/11/2011
The chapter was just fine, but even if it wasn't we writer's all have a chapter or two we're not thrilled about. Anyway, I understand that school's starting soon and you're going to be busy. So take your time and update when you can. I'm not going anywhere. :)
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