AWWW this was SHOOO CUTE! Loved it, loved it, loved it. Okay I have so many things I want to say so *TAKE A DEEP BREATH LIKE THEY LEARNT IN THAT CLASS* and start:

Well, I'd say heroine, but I didn't peg you to be the type swooned by Twilight references - This line made me roll with laughter! HAHAHA!

I loved the role reversal. I'm totally gaga over stories where the girl is like the pursuer and the 'dominating' one, so to speak (This may be because I'm a dominatrix but let's not go there :P)

And the end was so, so cute and awesome! I totally loved the way he asked her out - and the breathing barrier thing - EPICNESS! :)

Just two things:

I think it should be 'Breathe. breathe' instead of 'breath. breath'. 'Breath' is a noun whereas 'breathe' is the verb.

ALso, I think FP cut out what you were trying to post here.
"Her eyebrows were furrowed slightly in concentration and he grinned. Before he could stop himself, he let out a ."
a what?

That is all :)

Ri

I love this oneshot! It's lighthearted and funny.

that was so cheesy

1 but then again, that why i love it! good writing, write more

This is so wonderfully cute

Short and sweet. :3