Reviews for First Blood
Solfires Shadow chapter 1 . 12/3/2002
Hmhm wow, for such little imspiration it turned out rather well. Very good poem. Im currently at a block as what to say, but ill just leave it with at this. Overall very immusing and well written poem. Good work
Kagome135 chapter 1 . 4/17/2002
Whoa, nice! I once wrote a poem of the sort from the spider's POV..
A.J.Peart chapter 1 . 2/19/2002
I wrote my poem called "Death in the Arms of No One" about a ground hog that was lying dead in the path that I was hiking on behind my residence building. I thought, at first, that it was a diranged thing to write a poem about, and I even hid it from people for a while, but I realized that it doesn't matter where the inspiration comes from. Plus, death in all it's forms is a very inspiring aspect of life.

As for the poem, it's pretty good, despite your doubts. I like the suggestion of redemption at the end, which makes the whole thing a window into something other than the spider (most likely ourselves, as it was for me).

There I go, writting yet another long review! Okay, the next review will be short I promise!
Meghanna Starsong chapter 1 . 1/29/2002
SPIDERS ARE SCARWEE. *hides head under covers*
AaZz chapter 1 . 12/21/2001
kwel i guess
MoshiMoshiQueen chapter 1 . 12/5/2001
very dark! it is really good! write more!
quynh chapter 1 . 6/17/2001
yea..yea..you are morbid,,but thats okee dokes..yer gao! hehe
Amaris chapter 1 . 6/15/2001
To be honest I thought this was one of your better poems. I was gonna read your story but then the subject caught my eye. Yes, kinda morbid but what do you expect when I've known you for oh...since fifth grade-5 years. Anyways, I'm gonna read your story now. Me
takichan chapter 1 . 6/5/2001
Good beginning, the ending good use some work *-, just trying to help. I dont exactly understand the very last phrase, about the spider never redeeming the first blood 'doomed to be lost' ? iono..maybe im just slow..hehe

susu p0p
Veronica Cereta chapter 1 . 5/30/2001
Wow. So far this is my favorite poem that I have ever read on
lisa chapter 1 . 5/25/2001
you killed a spider

you sick , kill flies, or better yet PMS queen

but dont kill spiders

i have a pet spider its dead

i cant think of any inspiring words to say
Ragdoll chapter 1 . 5/23/2001
hey that was kinda cool...dunno why...maybe i'm also "sadistic, cynical and morbid"!
BakebakeObake san chapter 1 . 5/22/2001
Professienelesem! If you can uderstand that word, you're cool! He, I think I like this one as much as happy poem. I dunno why...Why does the phone always have to quit functioning all of a sudden? Err...the life and death thing is cool...Nahiiiii...Nba nba.( I didn't try to write NBA, mind me) I can really get inspired easily...The things that I t? I don't see any changes. The poem is all about the truth. And you made it very dramatic, too. I wish you have a nice wedding(WINK WINK _). At my house(WINKWINK!) La.