This story is alot like Maid Sama so sweet

It's been more than a year... Are you going to update soon?

Why wouldn't engagement photo shoots go well?

I don't really feel like Liam and Nora have any chemistry...

I like Josh already :)

I'm choosing to believe that the subliminal message in Josh's words were - don't get married to Brooke!

It's great that Nora wants her studio to be her own but if she wants a studio at all she should accept her dad's money. :P

Liam isn't happy because he's engaged to a bitch! LOL

Poor drunk Nora! And ew, Brooke is a total bitch.

Aw, poor Nora.

Hot Nora! I love Tristan :)

Wow it's been a long time since I logged on to FP. And what a nice welcome I got! This story is full of promise. :)

Again, I feel like a lot of this is too much telling and not enough showing. Nora at times doesn’t feel like a photographer; I’d think someone who takes pictures for a living would have a lot more attention to detail, and adding in something to her personality would make her come alive more to the reader. A lot of the descriptions are a bit vague, so maybe you could expand on them to give her more of a vibe.
[everyone wasn't always all smiles for engagement photo shoots, and most times it required a good amount of effort on both the photographer's part as well as the couple's to create that romantic atmosphere.] Why not? This might just be a personal thing, but I don’t get why a couple wouldn’t be happy with their engagement photos. Maybe you could expand on that a little?
Some of this felt a little rushed, and there doesn’t really feel like there’s any chemistry between Liam and Nora. I feel like there should be a bit more build up before he starts spilling his guts to her. I also feel like you’ve crammed a lot of his backstory in. Why is he suddenly telling Nora all of this? It makes him come across as a bit…weak. Especially in terms of Brooke. Makes him almost unlikable. I think you could spread it out a bit more, hint towards his feelings rather than have him state them so explicitly. And be careful with POV; you switch between Liam and Nora in points and it makes more sense to stick to Nora. As always, hope this helps.

love it.. onward to see, what will happen next..

This is such a great story so far! It has a great hook and I am already interested! Nora seems like a great, realistic character and easy to relate to! I can't wait to read the next chapter! I hope you post more soon! This plot seems very unique and fun!

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I feel like a lot of this falls into telling; you explain a lot, leaving nothing for the reader to guess at, and it means that at times, the characters can come across as a little 2D. There doesn't feel like there's that much to them. The shift in perspective was a bit disorientating, especially as you've had so much time dedicated to the main character. It's a bit odd to suddenly switch. Chapter was a bit jumpy - the best thing I can suggest is to lengthen the scenes a bit, show more of the characters - show thier reactions and emotions rather than just telling it so explicitly - and it would really lift things up, in a way. Hope that helps!

Where did you get the idea to write about a blind character, and did you do any research to make sure you adequately captured the mannerisms and abilities of a blind person? Interesting story so far.