I enjoyed reading this. Your style is quite eloquent and easy to follow. I like Aline's characterization, though I did feel that the beginning used a lot of telling. It did not really bother me, but maybe it could be even better if you start the story off with her doing something tomboy-ish or show us her thoughts as she watches a happy couple. (I liked her feelings regarding romance, they make her very relatable.)

Reading this I really wanted to see some dialogue from Dickon to figure out what sort of character he is and then when I got some, I admit that I was shocked. Didn't see that coming! (Which is a good thing, I think the story really picked up there).

I was honestly feeling with Aline and feeling grossed out when he kissed her.

The only thing you could improve on here is this line: "kissing her brutally" Instead of just saying that it's brutal, maybe describe what makes it brutal for a more vivid image. (I know that's difficult, haha. I often cop out, too. )

And some punctuation issues I noticed:

["It didn't taste strange in the slightest did it My Lady." he said.] should be "It didn't taste strange in the slightest, did it, My Lady?" he said.

[with a ransom letter some time this evening". ] Period goes inside the quotation marks. Typo, I guess?

["Still", he continued ]- "Still," he continued.

Also, whenever you adress someone, a comma goes in front of the name/title.

That said, I really want to read the next chapter now :)

(Also, I've been wanting to thank you for your review on my story forever, but the review reply link doesn't work for some reason...)

Good job! You did a much nicer job on this chapter, as far as breaking up the text and the density of the writing. And ooh, the plot thickens!

Your story is good, but you could use commas more. I noticed this mostly in the first two paragraphs.

Write on!

Interesting beginning! I liked the abrupt change on tone in the story, it really drew the reader in. One second everything is peaceful and happy, the next she's being kidnapped and drugged. D: It really made me focus and want to read on.

Unfortunately, the first half was a bit slow for me. I know it's the first chapter, and there's certain things that have to be revealed about the character, but you might try breaking it up a bit. Maybe with dialogue? I have the same problem with density of writing in the start of stories. But the point is, I found myself skimming a bit, until I reached the point when Dicken's real intentions are revealed.

Overall though, solid start!