Reviews for Trinkets and Toothbrushes
Luna Carn chapter 1 . 5/30/2011
This is a very meaningful poem.
Guest chapter 1 . 5/20/2011
This is an excellent poem, I keep coming back to it
LiberryBooked chapter 1 . 5/18/2011
I like how it almost reads more like a conversation than a poem. I think that adds to the emotion in the piece.

My favorite part of the poem is definitely the enjambement in the last two lines. It's painfully tragic, but at the same time is the perfect ending to the poem.

I really enjoyed it.

LiberryBooked
Alazar-Ramir chapter 1 . 5/17/2011
So simple, yet so cold.

So calm, yet so sad.

It's the simple words and simple imagery that make the poem incredible. Even the fact that you make mention of "trinkets and Toothbrushes" items that one would otherwise not really give much notice of or exclude to add something more intimate.

The last paragraph is what snares me the most. Mainly because even as you read it, you almost feel the sigh as yourself turn off the lights. You've captured the right mood for the poem and you keep it up right up to the end.

Good work. :)
afa chapter 1 . 5/16/2011
This gave me goosebumps, I imagined the trinkets and toothbrush as my emotions and true self being personally withdrawn in preparation for the end