|Reviews for One Girl's Strength|
| Glee-chan chapter 24 . 9/3
I have to say that it's refreshing to see a writer on FictionPress who bothers to set up a premise, characters, and backstory before diving into conversations. So often than not, writers on here love to just jump head first into a story before the reader has a chance to get to know anyone, thus making it impossible to care about the characters. So I was very happy that you cared enough to set up the "world" before getting into the story.
As for the story itself, I enjoyed it. Since I also write school dramas, I was a fan of that. You also have a knack for writing characters, which people under estimate I feel. So often authors either writer characters as one-note, or else they all act the same exact way. So it's nice to read a story where everyone feels alive and their own person.
As for critiquing (since you brought it up at the end of most chapters), I'm not sure if I should. Since this is your first posted work, and I'm commented to this 4 years after the fact, some of the things I noticed probably have been ironed out by now. I'm not sure it's my place to say, given I love that there is an author like you on here and I feel there needs to be more like you on this site. But just for the sake of things I mention two things. Earlier in the story, there tended to be a lot of info-dump, only to be repeated by characters later. Also, sometimes the info-dump would show your hand on set ups, kinda taking the wind out of a dramatic moment. The other thing was Ran came off as a Mary-Sue a number of the times. She's painted as a bullied tortured girl, but nothing effects her and generally she's prepared for everything and stuff just works out for her. I do feel that towards the end this wasn't the case at all, but it took around 20 chapters to get there.
Once again, I'm so hesitant to say these things because of the given reasons above. I can tell that you grew during the course of this story, and those things I noticed started to pop up less and less. Overall I loved the story, and because of it I'm going to start another story of yours soon.
So anyone else reading this, don't let the negative things I said above stop you from looking into this story. CX is one of the better author I have encountered on FictionPress and the story is good enough to be published with some tweaks. Definitely a good read for some vanilla yuri and overall good high school drama.
| Guest chapter 24 . 7/28
I'd love to read an epilogue chapter. Maybe meet the parents kind of thing during Xmas? Then again, it could also be a sequel of how Ran meet her real 'family' and learn to love and be loved in return.
| Nejie 8059 chapter 24 . 12/10/2014
Amazing story with wonderful characters. I love the way you wrote the facts about bullying and discrimination. There's so much work you put into details. I can see you're a dedicated writer. I hope to read more of your stories especially continuing the adventure of Ran-chan.
| Guest chapter 24 . 7/5/2014
Nice story...i really loved it.
| Guest chapter 8 . 7/4/2014
I really hope that Ran and shiori get along in the future,
and for chikane and himeko as well,
and people start to be alittle better and nice.
nice story...till this chapter I liked it.
Im forwarded to read to the end :)
| FuzzySandwitch chapter 24 . 5/5/2014
I know it's been a few years since you finished this story but your wording for giving the characters "a break for a little while" made me wonder, are you thinking of writing a sequel for this story? You've created some wonderful characters, and I'm sure I wouldn't be the only one interested in checking in on them and see how they're doing in the future! Really enjoyed it, thank you for sharing your story with us.
| AnFri chapter 15 . 1/5/2014
I love your story, another awesome chapter ! Thx for posting this and please keep writing !
| AnFri chapter 14 . 1/5/2014
Have i told you that your story is awesome ? Ok it is awesome, and you are an awesome writer ! Thx for posting this and please keep writing !
| AnFri chapter 13 . 1/5/2014
oh thats evil, a jealous shiori !? Awesome story ! Thx for posting this and please keep writing !
| AnFri chapter 12 . 1/5/2014
This story is simply awesome ! Thx for posting this and please keep writing !
| AnFri chapter 11 . 1/5/2014
finally something sweet happens for Ran. great chapter. Thx for posting this and please keep writing !
| AnFri chapter 10 . 1/5/2014
Great chapter, awesome story, awesome writer ! Thx for posting this and please keep writing !
| AnFri chapter 9 . 1/5/2014
This chapter was really hard and sad but you are an awesome writer ! Hx for posting this and please keep writing !
| AnFri chapter 8 . 1/5/2014
There is not much to say except that this story is awesome ! Thx for posting this and please keep writing !
| AnFri chapter 7 . 1/5/2014
Absolutely great story ! Thx for posting this and please keep writing !