Reviews for Arthur and Willy
Ageswe chapter 1 . 6/21/2011
Some of your descriptions in this story are very good, I like the description of the clock shop as "old and dainty and it looked yellowed with age", sort of merging words that you don't normally associate with a store, but still giving it the feeling that I imagine you want to acomplish.

Other times, it seemed like you might be a bit wordy, or explaining things that could otherwise be shown, for example, you say "The man's tone of voice was different from just now as they were much calmer and warmer now", when that could have been expressed through his speach, such as you did with "'But I broke your things. I, I am sorry'".

Additionally, the last sentence could probably be a bit re-phrased... having one person talking and then another person acting on the same line is a little awkward.

- Ageswe
Rosemarysgraden001 chapter 1 . 5/20/2011
It was interesting, I really liked the relationship between the boy and the older man.

Rose