This is so bittersweet and beautiful, thank you for writing.

The way how Victoria felt about her son's death didn't make me feel like she was really sad, but since this is a estimated 15k words chapter, I know you will feel the urge to finish it as soon as you can. I quite like this story, although this story needs a bit more emotion to make the reader get moved. Christian didn't make me feel like he had fallen in love with Victoria. It is actually a nice story. You just need to improve a bit more

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This story was beautiful with tragedy and drama soon followed with romance. I liked how you made 19,827 words fit into one chapter properly. The only other story that did the was Everlasting Romance, a PJO fanfiction by Starblade17. I love this story. Peace!δθψες

I CANNOT DO THIS. I CANNOT STAND THIS. HOW DARE SHE ACT LIKE SHE IS A STRONG PERSON WHEN SHE IS SO EASILY TURNED ON BY SOMEONE WHO TAKES AWAY HER FREEDOM, THREATENS TO TAKE AWAY HER SON, KILL HER FAMILY. HOW COULD SOMEONE JUST LET THEMSELVES BE TREATED LIKE THAT? SHE COULD AT LEAST HOLD SOME GROUND - NO ONE HAS THE RIGHT TO ASK A MOTHER TO LEAVE HER CHILD BEHIND WITH A GROUP OF STRANGERS AND IT ISN'T SOMETHING THEY WOULD FIGHT OVER WITH HER. THIS IS FUCKING BULLSHIT AND I CANNOT READ IT. AT THIS POINT, IF THEY FELL IN LOVE I WOULD LOSE ALL RESPECT FOR THIS VICTIMIZED, STOCKHOLM-SYNDROME MOTHER-CHILD. SCREW THIS.

dis was an amzing stry i have read ever u r blessed ...
tears :) happpy wala though..god elijah..:(

I absolutely love this story. I could read it all day long.
I completely agree that it would be an amazing story if it was made into a multi- chapter story.

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This is so cute, but sad at the same time :( did elijah just die out of nowhere or he did because of something? :( still a very cute story though! :)

a good one

Nice story...So I bet you were inspired to write this because of Princess Mary's story...

However, the way you have written the story shows how unrealistic things are. Darling, you can NEVER contact a Crown Prince unless he had given the girl his personal phone number. It wouldn't hurt if you made a research though.

Good luck on your writing.

This story is so beautiful! It's sad Elijah died but it happens. Thanks for posting a great read!

i was crying at the end of the story.

Tragic ending, so sad...

This should definetly continue as a multi-chap, quite often I was craving for more details and I found some passages where a bit short, so much happens in this story, it deservea little more than just a one-shot :D

Aww, the story was sweet and wonderful! The way you write was so enchanting. I couldn't stop reading until the end!

Keep writing!

-Black Maya