Reviews for you've kept me up 'til sunrise
october lies chapter 1 . 5/27/2011
i tried to pick out a certain line or phrase that hung on me the most, but damn. i couldn't choose any specific one because it's so raw and sweet and bitter, all at once. your prose turns what would be ordinary moments (to me) into something much darker and deeper than i could ever portray.

"you've kept me up 'til sunrise,

your ragged fingers running down my spine,

whispering secrets to each vertebrae."

and

"i closed my eyes, sat up,

the spins gracing me, though my mouth was dry

and had been all night. you were there to catch it,

catch me,

dip me in your arms and lay my

dripping body back beneath the sheets."

and the old friend,

"you lie here beside me, you

stupid

gray

girl

and you never let me sleep"

once again, pleasantly amazed.
Yorkensmorkenstein chapter 1 . 5/23/2011
I love this.