Reviews for blinking links
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 6/3/2011
I liked the beginning. I thought the alliteration was great and I liked the personification too. The only thing is the word detachedly which isn't a word, but my problem with it is I didn't get what you meant since you made up the word. Did you mean the stars were detached as is aloof or that the dots were not completely connected?

The second stanza was good. Again I liked the alliteration. In the third stanza though you ask a question, but don't use a question mark that seemed weird to me. But I did like the play on i-spy and tricking the eye and then into blinking for the fourth stanza.

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