Reviews for snakes and ladders
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 6/3/2011
I like the title here. It works really with the fact that it's addressed at children. It's a great play on Chutes and Ladders and you incorporate it well into the piece with the line and also with the word slither.

First stanza lost me. They watch war and torture follow a person? I'm thinking you meant they watch war and torture which are following the person, but the phrasing was kinda confusing and awkward.

I didn't really get the italics though especially in the second stanza.

The rest of the piece is good though. It's a powerful and really horrific portrait of how the world could be.

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