|Reviews for breathing exercises|
| classic violet chapter 1 . 6/13/2011
I love the diction in this, the title, and especially stanza two and three. And the way it ends is perfect.
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 6/3/2011
"cold steels peels".. I didn't get this line. If it's cold steels wouldn't it be peel as the verb? Unless you meant peels as a noun, but that didn't fit in with the rest of the stanza to me anyway..
I liked the rest of the first stanza though. Confined was a nice word choice. The second stanza was great. Powerful image with those last two lines.
In the third stanza though the rhyme seemed odd to me because none of the rest of it rhymed. Plus the repetition of tough was kinda eh. I feel like maybe you could've come up with another word. Plus I didn't get what cold air you were referring to and how that would fit into the touch exteriors.
The ending was interesting. I liked the personification, but I think I was confused because I wasn't sure what it was being compared to. Better than what?
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