Reviews for The Last Bearers: Revised Edition |
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![]() ![]() Hi CoolHanyou here I've been reading this story fora few days now andi love it but i have to ask if all bearers die during child birth why do they need a life mate? |
![]() ![]() ![]() It seems like not the happiest or best school, but still...a school where there's just English, Gym and History? That's kind of a friggin' miracle and I would not complain about going there...well. Not really. There'd be one thing I'd be freaked out about. But I'm not male so I wouldn't be there. Well, I'll probably figure out if they have to do stuff like the demon math courses if I keep reading. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this revision and I'm wondering if you are going to write something that wraps up everything like How everyone else are doing and stuff. The ending was great but left lots of ends untied in a sort of unsettling way. Btw I read part of this on fanfiction because Kingdom Hearts is amazing so yeah. Thanks Darling! I absolutely love this idea and this story, I've read and reread it multiple times :) |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I read the revised story first, than the unrevised story. For critiquing purposes, I like how the plot was laid out in this one. Though I prefer the character development and romance development between Daire and Aleksei in the first one. When I read this one, I felt their romance came full turn to quickly. Before I read the first version I chalked the quick romance up to the fact that there were these "bonds" that maybe help people fall in love faster(?). I have to say though this one, really leaves off in the fashion where I was expecting a sequel. Though there isn't. There were so many things changed to be honest, it was a completely different story. Where this story seemed to have a fleshed out plot and the other one seemed more off the cuff. I don't really understand why Alden was so sad when Bryan died in the first one though (was Bryan the one with Arlen? I thought he was with someone else). I really like the feeling of it, though I still don't understand the need for breeders. If bearers can still conceive with other bearers couldn't they both switch who is penetrating whom There would be no need to house and clothe a bunch of breeders from my point of view (or hire a bunch of guards). I didn't see anything covered that a passive and dominant make more passive (bearers) children. So I guess that's still a plot hole for me. I am not sure how any of this could have put Daire in danger from knowing. Other than the fact that they though Daire might not have believe them and went to the director anyways. It's a bit strange. I think it was good that Rusty (Dante) let them know ahead of time. I guess I thought Dante was the father of Aleksei. Mostly because they both have red hair and the flash back as well (plus Dante talking to him in the dream, I thought there was some magical bond thing parents might have or something). Good story. Off to read the side stories. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Just finished reading! Amazing story by the way. What happens next? You're going to write the sequel correct? You can't leave me hanging in suspense! |
![]() ![]() ![]() why do I have a feeling that Ayden is dominant secretly,? I mean maybe it's his blood but it was a secret or hidden. Lol but anyway I love the both of them! And Ian, I hope he can find someone worthy for him |
![]() ![]() it was an ok plot and the writing was good but I stopped reading after it became clear how old Daire is when he became preg, I mean that's sick to even read let alone write something about a 13 YEAR OLD, I know children are having kids now a days but 13 year old is still a child not even a teen yet. that's all I am going to say I cant put into words how grossed out I am |
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![]() ![]() I should began with saying your story has a great plot. I really liked the earlier version of the story. This version I must say is way better in many ways. But the threesome thing didn't work for me. I'm a huge supporter of Aleksei & Daire's relationship and don't like the idea of it being shared. I just wish it would be just Aleksei and Daire. I hope there's gonna be a sequel I just wish there is one. The boys need a happy ending. I'm not on fictionpress but if you are on fanfiction please reply to dragonfly patranous. |
![]() ![]() I'm so glad you've posted this! I read the earlier version quite a long time ago and really enjoyed it. So I'm looking forward to reading this version as well. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Uh, I don't think I like where this story is going. The whole three-way love thing between Daire and Aleksei and Bryan kind of threw me off. Not really my thing, but I'll keep reading the story anyways. :P |
![]() ![]() Can you please, please, please do a sequel so we will know what happened to Daire and if Aleksei and Bryan gets Daire back. We need to see them back together happily as a family, possibly with their little one... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay, I wanna start of by saying that it took me 2 days to read this story because I couldn't stop reading! I honestly loved it, your story line was well thought out to me and I got sooooo into it. I loved your characters as well and deffiently will be favoriting this story. Also I was wondering if there will be a sequeal to this story? If not I understand because the way you ended it left me wanting more and I think it was personally a good ending cause that's what I want in a story :) anyway fantastic story and ill deffiently be looking at other things you wrote! |
![]() ![]() This story is going in loops and thus losing my interest. I only scanned the last 8 chapters hoping something will chance... |