Reviews for The Last Bearers: Revised Edition
lunasea chapter 39 . 8/11/2012
WHY!? Why did you kill ayden off!?:(((
Donequis chapter 39 . 8/11/2012
NO! AGH! I cried! How sad! I loved Ayden and I thought they made the cutest couple! Just, let me love you forever! I'm now very excited for the next chapter and to see how this story is going to end! Keep up the fantastic work! Also, I didn't spot any errors. I might've been unable to recognize them as errors though. :) Hope your hectic life calms a bit so you can relax a little!
lunasea chapter 38 . 8/6/2012
Oh. My. Fucking. God. I LOVE this story. It's amazing. Really. And I've read it all and I'm telling you, UPDATE SOON PLEASE. At first I was wary of the threesome thing cause usually I hate when stories start with a duo and end up with a trio but I love aleksei Bryan and daire together! Need to post a threesome sex scene soon;) haha do you pronounce aleksei and daire's names?... Lol anyhow I love it and you need to update pronto. Kay thanks! Haha
Kara P chapter 38 . 7/31/2012
Oh crap.
afan chapter 38 . 7/29/2012
Oh no..cliffhanger...not good...need update pls. pls. pls.
Donequis chapter 38 . 7/29/2012
Oh dear! What is this? You mean person you! I'm rather exhausted but my my, why do you do this to my exhausted mind? Once again, excellent job. I'm happily awaiting your next post, especially since you chose such a wonderfully anticipatory place to end it. Thank you for the post. :)
TheGhostChild chapter 38 . 7/29/2012

That was one loaded nutshell of WOW! Really good but really sad chapter :/
Donequis chapter 37 . 7/21/2012
Darling, I love this story. Absolutely love it. I may be late in the game but by god I'm glad I caught it! It's so fun I havn't stopped reading it even though it's nearly time for another day to start. I do excitedly await the next posting, as I really want to see what has been boiling up to the big bang in this whole thing. I want to see if the director will be brought down, or the council disbanded/reinstated but with new people! I am awaiting excitedly darling, you're doing fantastic! Keep up the good work! :)
Wings of Beauty chapter 37 . 7/15/2012
Love the chapter. Will Caleyn get pregnant with Ayden's children again? Will Daire get pregnant with Bryan's children? I want to know! Update soon!
TheGhostChild chapter 37 . 7/14/2012

-bites my lip nervously- OHMY.. I sense drama..
Anihyr Moonstar chapter 4 . 7/14/2012
So, I have some basic questions, some points that make me just wonder, and others that come off as pretty disturbing. This far into the story, I get (or assume, at least) that "bearers" were created in the process of genetic manipulation in an effort to create a race of superior humans. (This might have been a good thing to add in earlier, or at least hint at, since for the first four chapters up to here, I was very confused on why an apocalypse would suddenly result in males that could become pregnant at all.)

Even with the explanation of genetic mutation though, I have to wonder why scientists would feel having pregnant males was a genetic advantage or even a remotely good idea. If there had been some illness affecting women and either killing them off or making them infertile, that might make sense, but there is so much about the genetic makeup of men that would have to be changed for them to be able to become pregnant, carry a baby, and give birth, that unless there was a significant reason for scientists to persue it, it doesn't seem like something that would be on their agenda (unless it was an *accident*, but that seems even more unlikely, particularly since they're going to such efforts to "preserve" these bearers).

If this were an alien race, or a high fantasy story with magic, I'd be willing to suspend more belief, but because you're setting it simply in the imagined future of our world, it has to fit in more with what would seem possible.

Alright, moving on. I get that they want to preserve these bearers (but why, I still don't get; obviously, there are women in the world - it was a female nurse that took care of Daire in the very first chapter - so why keeping males around that could become pregnant was necessary...I don't get). Also, why would breeding bearers make more? Do they only give birth to male children who can also have children? Or do they give birth to both sexes and just...*hope* that some of them will also be bearers?

Finally, I don't understand why they're keeping these kids in an "institute". I understand they want to keep them safe, I suppose, but why can't their parents be trusted with that (foster parents or otherwise)? They're so young, and it's obviously a stressful, trying experience. Why can't they be allowed to live normal lives?

On that thought, why are they treating these kids like a bunch of animals? They're teaching them, yeah, but basically, they're taking them from their parents, deciding who they're going to eventually have sex with *for* them (no choice seems to be offered here) and bam, that's it. If there was some sort of genetic link or "magical" force that bound a bearer to their "destined" mate, then this might *possibly* make some sense, but from their discussions, it sounds like the people in charge of the institute just "decide" who to pair up. (I'm thinking specifically when Caelyn and Ayden were talking and asking about why they would choose to put Daire with someone so cold.)

If there's no medical reason for them to *have* to be mated (such as, I don't know, only their specific mate is capable of getting them pregnant), then I don't see why they're essentially having their human rights stripped of them, and being forced by the institution to submit to, potentially, rape. It sounds really, really terrifying.

Finally, I hope they aren't expected to have sex as soon as they turn fourteen. It sounded like that was what was in store for them, and that's, so young. Not only are they being taken from their homes and cooped up like animals with no choice of who they get to fall in love with/be intimate with, but they're having that stage of their life forced on them as soon as their bodies are physically capable of doing so, regardless of however young and insecure and unpracticed they are mentally.

Anyway. This isn't badly written grammatically or anything like that, but a lot of the concepts are pretty jarring. I can handle male pregnancy and incest (I've written about both, myself), but some of the underlying implications of the story...are fairly unsettling when you think about it. Good luck with your writing, though, you obviously have a big fanbase following you.

- Moonstar
Guest chapter 36 . 7/2/2012
Amazing story, will be waiting anxiously for next chapter. Thank you for your wonderful story.
Wings of Beauty chapter 36 . 7/1/2012
Poor Caleyn. He has to go through so much! I wonder who his new mate will be. Can't wait for the next update!
TheGhostChild chapter 36 . 7/1/2012
Awesome job. I'm excited about Caelyn's new mate.
Azreael chapter 36 . 6/30/2012
asdfghjkl so many emotions. can't wait until the next chapter.
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