|Reviews for The Confessions of Cassidy Cain (Grandmaster of Theft 1)|
| Brievel chapter 3 . 8/24
I'm sorry, Rebecca seems like the usual silly twit blonde in stories.
I'm a traditional Christian, so lesbianism is... uncomfortable for me, but I'm not going to quit the story over it or anything.
The usual martial artist girl.
| Brievel chapter 2 . 8/24
Still a little foggy on the train set-up, but that's probably because I'm having flashbacks to Murder on the Orient Express, not the fault of the author.
I don't know, I adore mice, (and heights,) and just don't understand people who don't... and where is she getting the bit about them loving the taste of blood?
He's rather dense. And greedy.
| Brievel chapter 1 . 8/24
The prologue wasn't totally intriguing until Cassidy started speaking of the failure of traditional "good" methods and the necessity of doing what no one else wants to. On the other hand, it wasn't a turn-off, either.
Wynn seems pretty stereotypical. Probably very loyal. Narcissa seems very typical for a celebrity. Gerard seems to be caught between a rock and a hard place. And Cassidy is intriguing.
I think you did very well with the whole Adora's Tear-Yewel Followers thing.
Prose is good. Pacing is excellent.
| I Sink with the Ship chapter 1 . 7/12
I really enjoyed this. It was written well and interesting. I thought that Cassidy seemed a little too... perfect (for lack of a better term), for someone her age. Nothing in her pitch, demeanor, etc. to show her age other than when it was pointed out by the Priest. Obviously I am joining this story far later, but something I would think of, and maybe I've spoken too soon, but just going off the prologue.
I'm not sure how you would improve it, but the way the flashback was done was a little confusing to me. I realized from the content that it was a thing that had happened in the past but at first it threw me off.
Otherwise, I enjoyed reading the beginning of this. I am excited to continue reading.
| Tomoyuki Tanaka chapter 11 . 4/30
The mind games, politics and conspiracies flew over my head. It was fun to see the back and forth banter, but I just don't understand what's going on. I mean, Gale is correct, but was the way Cassidy tries to reason and pick apart his beliefs that she's the thief grandmaster makes her all the more suspicious. If I were Gale and I hear all those justifications and reasoning my gut feeling will tell me something is pretty suspicious
That's just me, though.
Cassidy reaps what she sows. I can't say I like her confidence, and it's fun to see her squirm once in a while and get pegged down or something.
| Tomoyuki Tanaka chapter 10 . 4/25
Edan Cain is the grandfather, right? I guess he's cool. Typical grandfather, worrying about his granddaughter, etc. Well, that goes for the relationship with Cassidy, seems like a typical relationship to me. Mind you, that's not bad. It's good. I guess?
No thoughts. I'm not one to speculate or predict. I'm just reading with the flow. And Cassidy's explanations and scheming flew over my head because for the umpteenth time, I'm not a fan of the genre. I'm like Edan in a way, I don't find all this matching wits and stealing appealing, so I would rather see Cassidy put the plan into action than her telling Edan what she intends to do.
| Tomoyuki Tanaka chapter 9 . 4/25
The first thing that came to my mind is Ozon Layer. Okay, I'm missing an e.
I'm not sure what to make of him. Evidently he seems like a fun villain. He's a bit on the outrageous and absurd side, so it's hard to like him, but I suspect you didn't mean for him to be liked. Just interesting. That definitely showed.
My reaction to Narcissa was just annoyance. She kind of reminds me of that Team Rocket trope, gets blasted away and acts all meek, only to return the next episode acting all high and mighty. But that's just me. I thought she was interesting at first, but after the somewhat anticlimatic confrontation, she pulls this annoying stunt which seems more irritating than threatening. Like Team Rocket. Always present, always bumbling, but you know they're going to lose and return next episode. I dunno.
Cassidy? Um, well. I dunno. I've no thoughts on her trick there. It just seemed weird, and then she's acting. I'm like, okay. Fine. But again, this drama, acting, fraud, deceiving thing isn't my cup of tea as you already know, so obviously my comments are not to be taken seriously.
| Tomoyuki Tanaka chapter 8 . 4/16
I think the problem is with me not reading enough detective, thriller or mystery novels because that just went over my head. I don't understand what exactly is going on.
Wouldn't the recording of Narcissa actually put Cassidy in a disadvantage instead? Considering the fact they talked means that Narcissa has caught Cassidy in the act.
At least I understand that last bit about Gale last chapter. I had almost thought he was a police officer arresting Cassidy, but he ended up having a deal to offer her. Huh. The whole politics confused me, and I sort of understand Gale's side of the story. I also understood Cassidy's reason for refusing. Having a secret police is no way to run a country, but having uneducated masses vote for the loudest (but dishonest) guy isn't exactly ideal either. What I was confused was the length with which Gale went to recruit Cassidy. Does the Viceroy need a thief? Whatever for?
Well, I probably need to read it a second time to understand what's going on.
| Tomoyuki Tanaka chapter 7 . 4/16
I am a bit confused. Wasn't the point of the "duel" for Narcissa to catch Cassidy? Doesn't this count as Narcissa catching Cassidy? I mean, she was waiting for Cassidy to crawl in and steal the Tear, while I thought Cassidy was supposed to steal it unseen and unnoticed. All Narcissa has to do is call security and Cassidy would have lost the bet.
Why doesn't Narcissa do so? All because of Ozon? And if Gale is gonna catch Cassidy anyway, doesn't that mean she has lost the bet?
Sorry, I must have misread something or misunderstood the rules of the bet. I should re-read it again when I have the chance.
The interrogation was a bit weird, but then Cassidy is a pro, and I'm not, so I'll trust in her judgement on how to carry out interrogations (though like Narcissa I was like "get to the point already!"). As for Narcissa being the first antagonist of the series, it just felt anticlimatic. As I said, wouldn't Narcissa have won the bet since she "caught" Cassidy or was waiting for her? What was with all that Cassidy asking her to weave a narrative speaking highly of her? Did I misread or misunderstand something? And wouldn't Gale's presence mean that Cassidy loses? Or she wins the bet as long as she escapes?
| Tomoyuki Tanaka chapter 6 . 4/12
I was a bit thrown off because while I knew you rearranged the chapters, I wasn't sure how you did so and where I should continue reading. Hmm, well, it's fine. I managed to reorientate myself somehow.
I guess the execution was done, everything was fluid. I can't say it was suspenseful, it was pretty anticlimatic to find Narcissa sitting there waiting for Cassidy. Well, there was the twist of the code and the Ozonnile, but I guess that's a good thing. I don't know if I'm interested enough to know, but the mystery genre never appealed to me so don't take me seriously.
The world building is as splendid as always, you never leave out details. I think Cassidy's assessment is easy to follow, your writing style is simple and fairly readable so I'm never in any doubt as to what happen. And I don't like predicting stuff, I just like being along for the ride - one of the reasons why I'm not a fan of mysteries and thrillers, but again that's personal preference and no fault of your writing.
| Tomoyuki Tanaka chapter 5 . 4/9
I really like Wynn and his past. No, I mean, seriously, this was a good chapter. It developed Wynn's character a lot and elaborated on his relationship wiht Cassidy.
But...I just feel that it's misplaced, like you're distracting away from the main heist. I mean, you could have put this flashback somewhere else, in another arc where it's not a flashback within a flashback but its own flashback (if you get what I mean). Have an entire arc about Wynn himself and this would come into play here. Okay, I don't know what I'm talking about.
Other than that, this was great and I can't help but like Wynn a lot more.
| Tomoyuki Tanaka chapter 4 . 4/9
Rebecca is...cool, I guess? I mean, I enjoyed the magician aspect, and she flirts like, well, a cool person. I can relate to Cassidy's opinions on romance, and I empathize with her putting up with Rebecca and enjoying her company while keeping a distance. I've nothing against lesbians, but I'm not a social justice warrior either, so rest assured I've nothing to say about Rebecca's sexual orientation other than I strongly believe everyone has the right to decide on their own orientation and not be discriminated for it.
Rae is...I dunno. I mean, to be frank, we're supposed to be reading about the grand theft on the grand express, so I felt that this scene could be cut short. In other words, that whole sparring scene was unnecessary, if you ask me. It took away from the grand theft on the grand express scene, because that's what I'm reading this for, and it feels a bit dragged out and irrelevant. It could just be me, though. I might be too impatient.
I do like the mention of Rae liking Wynn, it adds more dimension to her character.
| Tomoyuki Tanaka chapter 3 . 4/9
Uh, I'm not going to say much about the questionnaire, because I have no idea how stealth works, so I'm just going to take your word for it. Cassidy being afraid of mice makes her mousy. Okay, joking. But I see you're trying to add dimensions to her character, which is well done. Jeff Perkins sounds a bit suspicious when he asked for fifty thousand crowns, but I hope he won't betray her.
Looking forward to more!
| Tomoyuki Tanaka chapter 2 . 4/8
Cassidy is an awesome narrator, and I guess I like the set up. The confrontation between Cassidy and Narcissa was intense, and you can see direct opposites clash, and I think that was quite the pinnacle of conflict that you pulled off there, and it was excellently done. I especially enjoyed the way Cassidy goaded Narcissa, and despite Narcissa being a hateful character I like how you portrayed her down to her narcissism, her shouting and spitting (everything in caps), her demands to be addressed as madam, and her arrogance. That was all done very splendidly.
Uh. is there anything to say about Cassidy and Wynn's relationship? It looks like the typical boss and subordinate relationship, with Cassidy being the creative while reckless one while Wynn's calm and caution complements her. Otherwise there's not much else to say.
Valkyries...I have to admit it I burst out laughing when I saw Vincent's Valkyries. The guy has one hell of an ego. Oh boy. I'm going to enjoy reading about his character really soon.
No, I don't want to figure out Cassidy's plan. I'm just here for the ride and to enjoy the unfolding of events. I'm not a thriller or mystery kind of person, I like having things spelled out for me. Maybe it's because I'm stupid, but I'm of the opinion of keeping things simple.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
| Tomoyuki Tanaka chapter 1 . 4/8
Yes, the prologue drew me in, I think it was Cassidy's character in particular that drew me in. The intrigue and dialogue, particularly with the thoughts running through her head. My first impression of Cassidy was strong, confident and proactive, I think. She takes what she wants with her own hands, and immediately acts on what she thiks is right. Wynn seems like a cool guy, very dutiful and loyal.
Hmm, I like the contrast you set up between Gerard and Cassidy. One is a pacifist and very passive, the other is a lot more aggressive and proactive. It set up a conflict between their principles and that was pretty awesome. It already presented a clear dilemma in the story, which was easy to follow and imagine. Narcissa, on the other hand, there's too little about her to say anything for now, but she seems the typical narcisstic villainess, but I believe that was your intention.
That dialogue at the end was pretty cool, and was a splendid cliffhanger.
I look forward to the next chapter!