Reviews for Too Far
SaraEsperlo chapter 1 . 6/4/2011
Love this story :) Can't wait to read it again!
non.graceful chapter 1 . 6/4/2011
Plot is interesting. Smoking through it isnt.

Change your wording around.

Instead of making the character being awakes by her alarm clock, perhaps you could open up with something meaningful. Something that catches everyone's attention.

I won't lie to you, I thought the beginning was horrible. I think you should fix it up.

You need help, inbox me. I'll be happy to help