|Reviews for empire|
| steffxnie chapter 4 . 4/18/2012
My favorite chapter in this collection. Maybe it's the song, maybe it's the emotions expressed, it just reminds me of a lot of things. Thank you for writing this. :)
| dietredpop chapter 4 . 2/17/2012
If it didn't actually make the stories better, I'd tell you to use correct capitalization. But it does.
Great job. I can really feel the emotion in all of them.
| Dark Blue Lover chapter 4 . 10/13/2011
Definitely relatable! I love your descriptions; really well to imagine! And the end's kinda sad ;_;
I think "empire" is my favourite out of these, but all of them are great! Keep writing :)
| Dark Blue Lover chapter 3 . 10/13/2011
I like this, especially the end. Once more, great work on the prompts!
| Dark Blue Lover chapter 2 . 10/13/2011
Wow! Definitely another poem worth reading :D I really like that contrast between how it could be and how it is. Really relatable!
| Dark Blue Lover chapter 1 . 10/13/2011
So pretty. Definitely relatable. I love your imagery, especially the dust on the road, somehow. "I have had no correspondance from anyone... for seventeen sunsets and... it's getting rather cold on this dusty path." Wow.
Only one thing, I have a small problem with using "&" instead of the word "and"... but it's kind of becoming common on , so it isn't your fault.
Great job :)
| AppleCrumble chapter 1 . 9/23/2011
Wow, I really like this, its so good and effective!
:-D Keep writing!
| a theoretic revolution chapter 4 . 6/28/2011
oh, this was *so* pretty and a bunch of other adjectives i can't think of right now - "burst into life" is my favorite poem of this collection so far. kind of heartbreaking in a way, reminds like a hollowness in your heart you can't breathe over. definitely keep up your writing, i'll be looking forwards to an update, whenever that may be :)
p.s.: and just so you know, i'm blasting "chasing cars" as i click the submit button. one of my friends used to sing this all the time... "forget what we're told, before we get too old" *sigh*. snow patrol's the best. were you able to see them in concert? i'm guessing by the scenario you wrote this chapter in you were... lucky duck! haha.
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 6/12/2011
Beautiful. I wish there were a bit more imagery, but that's just a personal preference. It's still gorgeous as it is. I love the seventeen sunsets bit. Lovely. Keep writing! :)
| Tytherpol chapter 3 . 6/11/2011
i like victorious villains
i'm not one of them
haven't done any prompt writing in years, maybe i'll do a little of that today
| punctured.lungs chapter 1 . 6/10/2011
sad, but quite beautiful as well. i love the last three lines.
| chaos called creation chapter 1 . 6/4/2011
I like how you played around with tenses in this piece, it really relates to your main theme and holds the poem together. I think you could do without the brackets though especially in the first stanza-it'll read a bit smoother.