Reviews for Observation
Natalie Field chapter 1 . 6/7/2011
Ooohhh I do like the observations (hehe) that you've got here. School stuff can be cliche sometimes, and the way you've delivered this is risky, but I think you pulled it off. :) Good job. My favourite line?

"The signs are black and white, cold and unfriendly, like the tile must be under the girl's bum as she sits to take something out of her backpack."

Very nice. It surprises the reader.

Keep on writing!

Natalie