Awesome story!

this story has a nice plot, correct grammar-use (so far) and such.
the only thing that annoys me is the lack of full stops, question marks, exclamation marks, on some sentences.
other than that, well done.

Okay, I forgot to review on Chapter 1- But that's only because I am obsorbed in your story! I love great stories, and great writers to boot, so your story is just amazing.

I am completely in-love with your story, and your grammer is pretty amazing.

I may only be 13, but I know great stories when I read them, and your one of my favorites.

Good luck in the future!

-ForeverFiction17

hey there, great story I'm really enjoying it. I just thought I'd give a couple of pointers so it could be even better and more believable.

Try and work on grammar and spelling, as typos are very annoying for readers. Most of it is good, just a few mistakes on each page.

This one may seem annoying, but I don't think that an average English boarding school would allow boys and girls to share a dorm somehow. When I've been on residentals with boys, we were on different floors or even completely different buildings, and if we were caught in the boys dorms, or they were caught in ours, we'd get in serious trouble!

Apart from that, a really good story!

This is a good story, kind of overdramatic in many ways... (confetti bursting from the ceiling etc etc)

I found that your writting style is a bit childish since your jumping fom past tense to present tense from time to time which is normal for one who is writting very fast. I usually end up typing four chapters of a story in an hour but I have to reread them for (many long and agonizing) days before I actually post them and I still mispell or get my grammar all screwy. (teehee)

I loved the basic idea of this story and when you continue to improve in your writting skills and capabilities I cannot wait to read other new stories you can create. In quite honesty this book reminded me a bit (Just a tiiiinneey bit) Of Ouran host club, I guess its because of the name of the school more or less. (Ouran Academy for the rich etc etc) anyway enough of that, I tend to read the rest of your stories and im excited to see your continuing improvments along the way.

Happy writting~!

Kaitlyn123348

~K.I.T

XoXo

I love this series! its reallyy good! :D

Okay. Judging on what I've read so far, I'd say your writing STYLE is good, I don't understand why Grace was upset with Nate because honestly, it's not that big an issue. She should have been happy to meet her idol instead of punching his son in the arm. Your grammar needs some work as commas (,) are important in writing. They show where the breaks in a sentence are hereby making it easier to understand. Also I think you're not able to work with your tenses very well as you've switched from present to past continuous in two consecutive words far too often. May I suggest getting a beta reader?

Otherwise your story is good and the plot is original. Cool. :)

~Mgn~

amazing. love it.

I haha cant stop haha laughing at the haha behind the scenes/Bloopers haha part haha that was halarious!

I can't believe it's over. I can't wait to read the next one!

Are you gonna make the next book soon? I hope so!

Please, please, please! I'll be waiting!

-Amy Stardust

Really good keep on writing also I think Lillys present to Nate should be a night just the two of them then maybe some birthday sex lol ;)

Great last chapter but whoa new character hope to hear from you soon

AWWWWW! I knew they'd get together, I just knew it!

Awe so cute please write more