|Reviews for Bittersweet|
| Ram Attra chapter 1 . 4/24/2012
love this story the characters the deatail the stroy line and the title of the story!man if i was a publisher this would have been on the shelfs a long time i have a litle bit of luck here since someone is so amazing can you reveiw my story and possibly give some feed back for improvement or good thing in the story :)
Mate but this story has nothing wrong with and you shall cary on!
| TinfoilKnight chapter 1 . 4/11/2012
Did you edit and repost this? Ha, I know CyanideMango, she got kicked off this site a year ago...
Interesting story. It's short and completely unrealistic, and it somehow works that way. People marry for the stupidest things, and this is a great satire of that. I actually read this last night and bypassed it (*gasp!* I know, I'm a terrible person) but kept thinking of it today and came back to leave a review. :)
"She knew she shouldn't; it was going to ruin her diet again, but night after night, softer than a mouse, she tiptoed down the stairs." 'Softer than a mouse' is a tad cliched - c'mon, you're creative enough to come up with a better simile! I believe in you!
"Funny, he said. You've changed flavors- and he was sour all through their date." LOL. I don't care if you meant it or not, sour combined with flavors totally makes a pun.
:) Keep writing!
| CyanideMangoOfMassDestruction chapter 1 . 6/8/2011
This is hilarious! I love it so much! The tone of your writing was perfect, and the glass double D bra was pure genius! I loved the ending too.