Reviews for Tourniquet
Malaia chapter 1 . 6/13/2011
It sounds like it has potential. I think that if you rounded out the story with more it might make it more fleshed out. The characters are really rough but yeah, I think it could be hilarious and ofc, naughty (brothers are meant to be naughty right? - I think you've warped me).

I actually think the bathing scene would have been funnier if it was drawn out and the conversation that took place. The awkward moments etc. Especial if Marv had urges to push his brother as he bounced around on one leg.

It did make me smile D and giggle.
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