|Reviews for Flatmates Forever|
| RANDOM chapter 2 . 8/31/2011
not very inspiring
Could go somewhere
Will read to see how this goes
| Chromes chapter 1 . 6/27/2011
This has potential. Try to reveal characters in more of an indirect way. Like when you said, "Well, my name is Jake..." There are quite a few spelling and grammatical errors as well. If you slow down, take your time and edit well this story could have potential :) Keep writing!
| Koki Enwai chapter 1 . 6/18/2011
It feels a bit rushed (and chaotic, in more ways that one) and the infodumping is really obvious, but other than that it has a good sense of humor to it and it looks like it might be a fun story.
Also, there were some spelling errors:
Well, those are the ones I spotted on a second skim-through. And the grammar could use a bit, well, a lot of work. But like I said, on the whole, it seems like it could turn out to be a fun story.