Reviews for Rainbow Souffle |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Still waiting for a new chapter after almost an entire year has passed! Please update! |
![]() ![]() ![]() update soon please, i wanna read more and hear more about this "CAM". :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yes! The story continues! Buhahahahahahahaha! Update! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw! I love Cam, poor guy! But yay! At least he made a new friend in Drake! And as always I love Drake's narrating, he's just so funny with some of the things he comes out with! XD |
![]() ![]() ![]() CIEL WANTS MORE! This is amazing! Why are you wasting your time on Fictionpress? Send this thing to a publisher now! I love the ending but you really need to write more. Try and answer some questions: -Why was Gale kicked out? Will his parents come to his terms? -What about Zane? Any more conflict? -A new homophobe as the new popular kid? -What ever happened to Farin and Marlo? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Trying to bring tears to my eyes? Ughhhhhh u You evil! :) I just loved this adorable chapter. Perfect. Update soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ooooooooooh hehe ;) loving it even more. Hope you update soon. It seems I'm the only one who knows great writing skills around here. *flips off other people* continue to write if that's your dream. :) do it because u love it...and I LOVE IT WOO HOOOO! can I get a chapter 14! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey you! Update! ! Now! |
![]() ![]() ![]() That is so effing adorable! Can you update soon? I thank you for two chapters! You rock! I want to see some more of this Zane dude and hear some of Drake's past. Gale really makes me fall head over heels. I love it when he's in control of Drake. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Soooooooo cute! :) I want moreeee! Update soooooon? Pleeeease. |
![]() ![]() ![]() *major gasp* uppppdateee! Pleease? I love Marlo ;) hehe finally Gale asked him! Hope he says yes although I thought Drake is kind of cute with Drag too. |
![]() ![]() ![]() *SQUEAL* LOOOOVE IT! UPDATE A.S.A.P! Gale is so cuteee when he's jealous! Hehe. Update pleeeeeeease. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really really love thus. Its so good. I want you to update pretty please and if u post this on Wattpad it will get more views and I'll help you. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay, so my iPod hates me, but I really need to review this. I'm glad you like my reviews, but I'm still going to try to be a little more controlled this time. You'll see... (This isn't working.) First, there are still errors showing up... But I believe we'v already been over that... An it is much better than it was in the first chapter. It seems that you've been able to catch most of the obvious things, and all that's left is the things that may take more thought. As I've said, the smaller mistakes aren't that noticeable and you don't have to be so extremely serious as to worry over them... Though if you do get worried, I can help you to get rid of them if you want. I am wondering how Natalie asked Humphry to give Drake gym clothes in chapter two, when it is still his first day in chapter 4 when he gets home, and he tells Natalie about Humphry still being there... Perhaps I just read something wrong... If not, uhm... Watch out for plotholes? They can become terribly messy. I do like Georgie though... Sort of... I'm a big fan of precocious children, but don't let her fall into the stereotype... Or make her too much of a little adult. Children still have to be children in some ways, even of they are smart. This may sound like it contradicts a bit, but I've also read chapter 5, and in that chapter Georgie acts much more like a child... So, make sure to have her personality consistent. She may be a minor character, but she's still a character, and it's confusing when a character changes so randomly. She also heard Drake talk about who was bullying him, yet became instant friends with Gale... And, Natalie called Drake Gale when he came home from school in chapter five... I think that's enough complaining for one review... e.o Sorry to nag you about these things so much rather than just reading the story and enjoying it as it is. I tend to be really nit-picky and sometimes can't keep the editor that lives inside of me quiet... (I hired her for personal use, on my own stories and things... But she has trouble keeping her nose out of other people's writing as well...) |
![]() ![]() ![]() WHHHHYY!~? NOOOO . CLIFF HANGER. Update soon~! Gale just needs to admit he's interested in Drakey-Dra. Lol. |