|Reviews for Wish Amongst the Stars|
| moon-behind-dark-clouds chapter 1 . 1/2/2012
such a beautiful short-story! and so beautifully written :)
| 3M2R chapter 1 . 12/28/2011
Aww, this is sweet. (sorry for almost spamming up your inbox with reviews )
But it would be good to split it. maybe a double paragraphing for the change in perspective. Not that it's that confusing, but it MAY confuse. Just suggesting~
Your imagery is really good. I think that's like what I say almost every review. Jeez, I need something new. /thinks/ You paint the picture so clearly... crap, it's still the the same thing. Ahh but yes, it's REALLY clear, vivid.
I like that magical, fairytale and surreal tone the last paragraph holds.
The front read like a normal story, you know like the voice is that of a normal male/ female voice narrating it. Until the last paragraph when both of them come together and an omniscient perspective narrating the ending. It held that of audio cassettes for those fairytale books we read like Cinderella. I don't know, it reads like that to me. Passive, sweet, somewhat between a natural and unnatural reading with good articulations and perfect punctuations. Okay~ Just me lol I think too much. /nods to self/
| trainwreckdramaqueen chapter 1 . 6/23/2011
Woah, amazingly awesome story! I loved it.