|Reviews for Process of natural selection|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 8/6/2011
"of the daughters scowl"... daughter's
Ending with a period kinda seemed odd since the whole piece was not one runon sentence. I would either get rid of it so it just doesn't have any periods or punctuate the sentences throughout the piece.
I got a little confused about who the daughter was vs Megan. It says Megan gave birth and then it says they couldn't have children until the daughter was born when Megan was a teenager. Who is they? And how did we go from Megan giving birth to her being a teenager? It just really confused me.
I liked the piece though other than that. As always well written and I really liked the end. The second to last stanza was especially powerful.
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