Reviews for Me, the Little Sister
Violet-Rain13 chapter 1 . 6/26/2011
Poor girl, it is never fun to be seen as the little sister when you don't feel that way. Awesome story!
Variation-in-Progress chapter 1 . 6/26/2011
I think this piece is better off as poetry rather than prose because there is much more depth to input in prose, but your essential message would be more colorful as poetry. It is as if this whole piece is just small part of a whole other story, and I think the potential to expand(and introduce character and plot) would fit this story well.

However, if you want to stick to the current message, then I believe it is better put as poetry. The similes, metaphors, and the complete message would be expressed. Ultimately, the piece would be satisfied.