|Reviews for Not Pain as You or I Would Understand It|
| Abbytjie chapter 1 . 4/28/2012
I know you're trying to sound all sci-fi, but you're names are really hard to pronounce. You seem to figuritively stumble over the name everytime you read it, which really disrupts the flow of your story.
You could instead do things like:
Combine two common names e.g. Donica (Donna and Veronica)
Or make names easy to pronounce and spell, like Bilbo Baggins from Lord of the Rings or Elfangor from K. A. Apllegate's Animorphs.
Other than that the story's ok, but maybe a bit more description. For example: Where are the aliens standing when their holding their binoculars? What's the place around them like, is it the middle of the city or in a dark suburb?
If your saving these mysterious tidbits for last, I hope we eventually figure them out :)
| Silverleaf of the Forest chapter 1 . 1/4/2012
Well this was slightly disturbing... But then it became hilarious! I think our senses of humor are very different, but I can still very much appreciate this very much. The shock I had when I switched from curious to disgusted to laughing was impressive and made the laugh all the louder! Wonderful!
| Serendipital chapter 1 . 7/1/2011
The names were difficult, but I guess it's fine. They're aliens, after all.
I really liked this! It was...a little disturbing and depressing, but good nonetheless. I have nothing else to say, sorry. Just know that this was a creative idea and was written very well.
| 110Million chapter 1 . 6/29/2011
I...didn't get it...Sorry :( Mind explaining it to me?