I got a bit confused at first on what was happening and who died at first, right until I continued re-reading it which it than made sense. My favourite part in this chapter was this:
"Fact: this was my third attempt."
"Another Fact: This was also my third failure."
This was really funny to read! XD

This is hilarious! I love all the jokes in this! Especially the parts about neverland and peter pan and shoes! I'm laughing so hard right now that I had to sit here correcting my grammar before posting this review. The punctuation is really good already which only draws my interest in even more. Along with the storyline is already: romantic, funny, deep, soothing, and interesting. Mainly the details! This chapter was so descriptive I just loved every bit of it. Time honestly went fast when reading this chapter. Can't wait to read chapter two!

Okay, I must admit that I kinda liked this story up to the point till I read the part that sounds like 'what kind of gay nime is that? Even Mohammed is better'.
I don't even know how to convey how dissapointed and angry it feels. For you to disregard that name that badly. I don't know whether you're atheis or not but please change the name otherwise I'll take other step.
Good day.

Wow, I was surprised that Alex opened Bia mind to Jacob. I'm relieved. Also scared about Emily 's reaction to seeing her brother for the firstime in 13y.

Alex is holding his emotions back from Jacob by not allowing himself to feel anything for Jacob while they have sex. This isn't good.

You did an excellent job on their first sex scene. It was very hot and erotic.

Oh shit! Jacob froze up right when they were going to finally do it. I can understand since Damien used to rape him and that is all he knew before.

Whoa, Alex turned Tina! She's quite the character. I loved how Alex called Jacob "little one." So sweet.

Alex is just so sweet to poor flustered Jacob. I like how Alex hasn't put the moves on Jacob but allowed him to come to him first.

12 years of behaviors due to abuse would be very difficult to change. Glad to see that Alex. Is patient and Jacob is making progress.

Love Damien's pad. Poor Jacob still doesn't trust him but I don't blame him.

Whoa, Alex. Is an empath...meaning he can read minds? Cool.

I really like the start of this story. Jacob is rescued from his abusive maker, Damien. Alex seems too good to be true.

hi! I read this story in adultfanfiction and I love it. Too bad I can't write any review since I'm not a member. This story really broke my heart. I thought there would be a happy ending when Alex saved Jacob, I didn't see Damian second coming to the story. really, there should be a way to get rid of him so Alex and Jacob can be together again. But I kinda like Mo. So, maybe you'll create a menage-a-trois between Alex-Jacob-Mo? I'll be looking forward to seeing what you'll do to Alex, Jacob, and Mo next :D

Poor Jacob, not being able to trust Alex as long as Damian's personality is still there :( And poor Alex, not being able to control it even with how old he is.

I really hope they can be together again. I look forward to the sequel.