Reviews for Book 1: Attachments Chapter 5: Unseen
disrhythmic chapter 5 . 8/4/2011
Ohh, this was so good! :D Okay, I love the water nymphs, first of all. Fantastic and creative. I also love Jane's... I don't know, happy-go-lucky-ness. The way she just takes everything in stride. It's refreshing after all the fighting and scheming. :)

One thing you might want to consider... try putting some line breaks in when you switch between characters (like Able and Joseph in the vault and Naomi and Lisa fighting the invisible guy). It's a little confusing otherwise.

Loved it! :D -skips off to the next one-