Reviews for Caught With My Hand in the Track Bag
anon chapter 1 . 12/16/2013
You're amazing you know that, right? Although I am a bit sad that the story is already finished. I'd love to read more about Janine and Zane, because as much as best-friends-turned-lovers are great, there are so many stories about them it really is a bit too much. Plus, it looks like there is enough tension in that Edward guy to last a lifetime. All in all the story is great and I love it. I'd be even happier if you would've written a second chapter. Hopefully, more. Thanks again :D
Almost Genius chapter 1 . 1/7/2013
I left a review with my Fictionpress account, but this is so awesome I had to review again :)

I must've read this story at least a hundred times. It never gets old. Every time I feel sad, I read this. I've been very exclusive with my favorites list on . This is on it. Enough said.

*Sigh* If only my love life were this interesting... As of now it doesn't exist. But it's nice to read these stories and escape for a while. Thank you.

This was amazing. I love you for writing it.

End Review: Amazing story.
10infiniteplaylist73 chapter 1 . 1/4/2013
OH MY GOD! That literally makes me want to die! When people confuze 'your' and 'you're'. It's so annoying. Amazing story by the way.
Ngoc1231 chapter 1 . 12/6/2012
And now I know why you had to put up that it was a one shot. Dang. That ending. I can't, or feel slightly obligated to not like Zane haha. Idk, I totally fell in love with James. I'm a sucker for the best friend relationship thing. But wow, it was a good story though. And I think for my own personal ending, she ends up going and Zane gets crushed by James haha.

Love the story!
*Ngoc1231*
heal me forever chapter 1 . 10/13/2012
last part was rushed ... ::)
LSF chapter 1 . 8/15/2012
Ahahahhahahahha. I enjoyed this to no end. It was incredibly fun, and just perfect for what I needed. I can't stop smiling hahaha.

I respect your decision to keep it a oneshot, and really, it's quite good as one. Props!
Bluestreakspirit chapter 1 . 6/23/2012
HAHAHA WHY IS THIS NOT A FULL STORY? Ohmygod that was great. James was precious. And Zane was a shmexy jerk. And Janey-dear was hilarious. James was the best, though. GAHH I REALLY WISH THIS WAS A FULL STORY. It was so good :) Ahh good times. Thank you!

-Cat
whiteday chapter 1 . 1/6/2012
Hot.
Kina Kalamari chapter 1 . 8/23/2011
Kind of an odd place to end it, but it was good all the same. For some reason I really loved this line: "James is stretching, and I sneak up on him. "Good luck!" I holler, jumping on his back." The mental image made me laugh muchly. And her accidental retort about endurance also made me chuckle.

Very nice. )
BabyDollAndGiantFreaK chapter 1 . 8/21/2011
At first I was about to just click out of this story, but I'm glad I didn't.

I like how you wrote about and put this in a track meet. If you didn't know anything about track then you could've fooled me. It seems like you confidently knew what you're writing about which is of course excellent. Janine's character is memorable, but then her name isn't. I could easily forget her name.

James and Zane were both very interesting.

I love James and Janine's relationship. Throughout the story though I have to admit that I wish they'd end up together. Albeit cliche-they're cute and had more chemistry then Janine and Zane.

Zane definitely had the mysterious stranger aura. Janine has the purely physical attraction towards him which was great if that's what you're going for.

You built up the story great and it's an excellent ending that leaves people wondering. For me though it just felt empty and bottomless. Again great for a cliffhanger. Personally I prefer single chapter stories to have closure.

I definitely enjoyed this though.
non.graceful chapter 1 . 8/20/2011
I had to stick around for the good stuff- the beginning was quite boring.

The ending was funny.

Your writing is perfect

Keep on writing,
InkWitch chapter 1 . 7/28/2011
THAT WAS AN AWESOME ONESHOT.

What a cliffhanger, BRAVA!

Oh my god, that was so well written. Except, well, you have an unneeded character: Lisa. She didn't really have a purpose in this story.

Zane Edwards is a sexy badass, and he's sexy.

I love the main character. I love how real she is, and how you mixed the bookish unrealness with actual teenage life realness. If that even makes sense.

ANYWAYS, AMAAAAZING story, THANK you for putting it up and I LOVE THIS!
koolkat136 chapter 1 . 7/20/2011
I Like It! I remember when I was in track I did hurdels and I hurt my leg because I landed wrong on the 2nd hurdel and I couldn't run for like the whole track season :/...my coaches wouldnt let me do hurdels anymore...
monkeyberyl13 chapter 1 . 7/14/2011
This was hilarious. I loved the situations, and the overdramatic Soul Suckers confrontation... it's great. I want more D:

Seriously, though, good job. A very entertaining story with fun (although very slightly obnoxious...) characters that I very much enjoyed reading. Thank you :)
urtenshii chapter 1 . 7/11/2011
I thought I was only mistaken when I saw you had the same profile pic with 'Steak of Serendipity' but I guess I wasn't :)

Yey ! You wrote a new story !

Speaking of which, I like the way you develop the story. It was just sad how you don't want to continue it. I mean, I hate being left hanging and the story did left me in such state.

But, I must say, good job for this one. You were able to give personalities to your character that would most probably be loved by the readers. Particularly, I like Zane's character. He's mysterious and sexy as hell ! :)

Good job and keep on writing!
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