Super Awesome Story! Wonderful and realistic ending, too!

hoping u are not abandoning this.

i know real life can be quite a demanding little madam but pls do update the story.

pretty pleeeeeaase? :)

Such a cute story. I can't wait until Makayla completely trusts him. It's also kinda funny reading it and knowing that Chance's plan isn't going to work. In the end they do just go in guns blazing...so to speak. Anyways, love it. The only thing that really irks me is how you overuse '...'s. The dramatic pause is good every now and then but not every sentence or two.

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Wonderful story. You've had me up late reading, and snapping at my family (GO away! I'm reading! YES! This is important!). I loved the depth you put into this, and the unique story. You

ve got me look at the world with a different. Love Chance. Love Adrian. Love Neil. Love Mack. Love... okay, not the bank manager...

Love the story, and I will be definately reading the sequel. Don't stop!

This story is absolutely amazing! I remember at the beginning, you said a few people were saying how your book is similar to a movie. Was it called 'The Town'? God I loved that movie. I seriously would not have realised they were similar had you not pointed it out! The only thing similar about them, really, is the fact that the woman works at a bank and the bank was robbed by a man. So compared to the mound of stories on fp that are EXACTLY the same, I don't think you have to worry about your story being similar to that movie!

Anyway, again, this was an amazing story. Usually I don't like to read the male's POV as I like the mystery when you don't know, but I think the story wouldn't work without it. It was so realistic too and neither of them were overdone. Although there were huge chunks of just pure writing, it was not boring either. You didn't drag on about things (which I feel I do sometimes) but everything was appropriate to the story.

The bit at the beginning kept me reading, as well. I swear, at about chapter 15 I kind of stopped reading because I was like, 'they're never going to get together!' and got all depressed, but that first chapter kept me going! I didn't expect to like the ending but you wrote it so beautifully that I had to like it! So you're writing a second novel? I can't wait! Makayla sounds like she's going to be totally kick ass and Chance is just so hot.

Great story and I can't wait to read the sequel!

Wow. I just cannot stop rereading this. Once twice, a thousand times. And each time the part where he cuffs her makes me laugh even more.

God, he's so damn hot!

This is one of the most gripping stories I've ever read, and I'm very surprised you haven't deleted it from here and got it published.

So… I practically wrote a saga earlier but… it disappeared! There was some stupid security issue with my school computer and the novel I wrote in response to this amazing story just disappeared. D: I’ll try to keep things a little shorter this time round. After all, I almost did a Lit essay. Okay, not really. I’d fail Lit if I submitted something like what I wrote. There was almost no analysis. Mostly intelligent-sounding fangirling. Heh.

Oookay. So I liked how you cast Chance’s father. He isn’t all evil cos it’s obvious he loves Chance plus he honestly believes he ‘saved’ Chance, in a way. The part he ‘bribes’ visits out of Makayla is pretty funny too, hehe. Smart man.

Here are four adjectives I would use to describe your story: sweet, gut-wrenching, humourous… Gah I can’t remember the fourth one I used. D: Well anyway, all the lies he was telling… it was practically painful. I think instead of going on and on about how I like your characters, I’ll cut to proper feedback:

I felt that you took rather too long to get to the point in time in which your prologue was set. YET, it was a good hook technique. I pretty much couldn’t put down your book because I was reading and reading, waiting to get to that part, wondering HOW you were going to get there. Also, when you finally DID come to it, I didn’t expect it! Which means you did a good job of not making everything too obvious cos I’m generally quite good at predicting what happens next. Of course, this could also mean too many of the stories on this site follow similar plots/ clichés. I think the main reason I didn’t see Chance being threatened into going in “guns blazing” was your characterization of him. The whole story he struck me as someone very much in control: of the situation, of his emotions, of his outward behaviour. It seemed the only time he didn’t have himself in tight rein was when he was Makayla. So I never expected that any of his plans to do with other people would ever fail. :)

You ended the book really well. In the second last chapter, your plot showed signs of slowing down. I’ve read books where they don’t show the action slowing until the last chapter. Then there are the books which take a few chapters to end and seem to just drag on. I think that despite what I felt was a lengthy approach to the prologue, you paced your plot very well. The long approach was likely just my impatience since I was never actually bored during the book. I didn’t read anything and think, “Oh, this is kinda pointless. Get on with the story!” There were many twists and turns, what with her investigating and sharp mind and his piling lies.

Character-wise, I love how principled Makayla is. She sticks firmly to her morals and isn’t easily swayed, which is admirable. She doesn’t confuse what she SHOULD do and what she WANTS to do. Like she wants to lock him up, yet she doesn’t entirely hold back information about his biological family because she believes that’s the wrong thing to do, despite how tempting it is to not tell him and take away the chance for his family to “pay his way out of jail”.

I also love how Chance loves her righteous desires so much despite his own lifestyle. Perhaps it is the fact that he was raised in lies and never knew otherwise that makes him love her so much. In a way, I feel that they’re kinda similar because they both enjoy getting a rush, except they go about it different ways: she gets her rush arresting the bad guys. And I feel like if he hadn’t been raised as a con-man, he might, just might, have become a cop too! Since they have similar drives and are kinda adrenalin junkies.

So… apart from all that, I’m really excited for the sequel! xD Oh, by the way, you did Chance’s struggles with his identity and his guilt really well. :) :)

Amazing book! Don't ever stop writing

haha it's like... the bank is under a spell! all its tellers seduce their con-men instead! xD

hahahaha i love how you end with "he was so dead when she got home"

OMG! has to be another really really good book i have read.

i cant believe you left it at a really big cliff hanger... ahhh its killing me...

also when are you planning to write the next book to not a chance?

Holy cow. I never expected it to turn out this way. Most authors would have worked their creative licenses until a happy ending. I'm actually glad you didn't mess with your characters to create that happy ending, but I am sad that they didn't end up together. I am looking forward to your follow up series! Best of luck!

Wow wow wow. Just found this story on ADoR and I completely love it! I'm looking forward to reading your other stories . Can't wait for the sequel.

Hey! This is Melissa from A Drop of Romeo. It's my pleasure to announce that Not a Chance has been added to our archive under the Forbidden category. Here is your review:

Melissa Thinks: Bank teller Makayla Lewis unknowingly starts dating a con artist after she catches him stealing her wallet. She knows he’s bad for her, as pointed out by her best friend Neil numerous times, but can’t seem to suppress her attraction for him. Chance is an experienced con man who, in order to pull off a bank robbery, sets up an elaborate ruse to reel Makayla into his trap. He finds himself questioning his own morals and even breaks his number one rule: do not fall for your mark.

Before this story, I had never read anything by Cupid’s Psyche. Oh my gosh, what was wrong with me? It was fabulously written, the plot was easy to follow without being predictable and it was just one of those stories that I didn’t want to end. The thing I liked best about Not a Chance is how you know from the beginning that Chance is playing Makayla and because the author writes parts in his POV, you get to see his love for her unfold beautifully. Makayla was such a strong willed and beautiful character, I felt so bad for her! And although I seriously wanted to hate Chance, I just couldn't. He charmed his way into my heart and that just goes to show what a great author Cupid’s Psyche is. I know you’ll all be as captivated by this story as I was.