Reviews for Not a Chance
renegade01 chapter 1 . 7/9/2011
That last line made me laugh. And when he looks at her like she's an annoyance after she flings the bag at him. ;) This is interesting and unique. Can't wait for more.
spUNkyORanGE chapter 1 . 7/9/2011
I am so happy to see that you wrote another story. It was a great present to see when I woke up this morning!

Love the beginning. You have it ao accurate what it feel like to be at a job that is so boring and tedious. I could really feel exactly what she felt. I've been in jobs too where you have to be prepared for a robbery and the things they tell you to look for. It obviously completely different happening to you than just reading about it though.

At first, I thought this was going to be like that movie "The Town". I don't know if you have seen it. But the robber robs a bank then starts dating the girl and she falls for him. But it's a nice little twist to see that she is already dating him. I wonder what will happen with those two after. I bet it nothing good especially since you said violence happens in this book. Woo so excited (not exactly for the violence though haha that came out weird).

I'm glad you posted this and I can't wait to read more. Nice little prologue to pique my usual you are the best!
sora kinomoto chapter 1 . 7/9/2011
I know you weren't sure about posting it, but it seems really interesting! I hope Makayla won't be considered an accomplice. Thanks for posting it and can't wait for the first chapter!
Daddy's Little Peach chapter 1 . 7/9/2011
Haha, I can so see this being one of those Facebook pages...'The awkward moment when your boyfriend robs your bank' it!

Mish xx
my infectious smile chapter 1 . 7/9/2011
Haha what a sticky situation. But that was a great prologue...I can't wait to read the next chapter!
Devilish Kisses chapter 1 . 7/9/2011
Oh, wow, that was great! Really intense!
Arohanui chapter 1 . 7/9/2011
I work in a bank and although I'm no longer a teller the possibility of an armed hold up is one of my worst nightmares. I really liked the lead up to the robbery and found the way you described everything to be scarily accurate especially with Ester, I have plenty of regular older customers that will look for any excuse to come in for a chat lol. I really look forward to reading more! You have me intrigued already...want to hear lots more about this naughty robber boyfriend! So glad you're posting again I was having update withdrawals :)
lissalee chapter 1 . 7/9/2011
hmmm, interesting!

I'm intrigued by this Chance guy.
CoverGirlInLove chapter 1 . 7/9/2011
Love it!

Fantastic prologue. Of course, I could tell from the get-go her man was going to be one of those robbers, but it was still kind of surprising.

It was very enjoyable. I loved the introduction … going through the seasons - fantastic way to set the scene.

Very enjoyable, can't wait to read more.

Ps. I wish I'd heard the conversation at the bank for a story like this to stem from it.

YOUNG-the wild. free. in love chapter 1 . 7/9/2011

So I just finished reading the last of the Conversion trilogy and it was great...amazing actually. Then when I came back to your profile I saw that you had another story on there and I immediately came and read it.

This story looks good. I will definitely keep reading it when you update it. The beginning was kind of slow and I'm not gona lie...I skipped a couple of paragraphs just to get to the real action of the story. When I finaly got to the end, it got interesting and funny.

This story seems like it is very different from K&K and Conversion and I'm really interested on how it's going to end. So please keep updating...
wakeyourdreamz chapter 1 . 7/8/2011
Hahahaha, omg! That was hilarious, I mean, come on. Who goes to work at a bank, get's robbed and a gun held to their head only to find out, that ITS HER BOYFRIEND! Hahahahaha, I find that absolutely hilarious. What a conundrum.

Well, I've enjoyed it so far. It is very different to K&K and The Adam's Family *snap snap* tee hee.

It started off slow, but I was glad by the end of it.

Um, so you heard a conversation in the bank and that spurred this story. What was the conversation exactly? Cause, I'm thinking you were in the bank gettin' robbed? Or maybe the lady on the phone was? I don't know.

Great start, Stephens.
veyo chapter 1 . 7/8/2011
WHOA! Update this looks so good.
The-Alpis chapter 1 . 7/8/2011
hehe wonderful climax and cliff hanger at the end there.
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