|Reviews for Home|
| DutchAver chapter 1 . 10/5/2011
I like the set-up of this one-shot, I really believed Alexander(hurray for that name, by the way, make a guess why D) wouldn't show up because he had died. Fortunately, I was wrong. It reminds me of a one-shot I've written in the past that had a similar theme, but a different ending.
You've captured the relief and anxiety Jade has really well, I really liked reading it and I felt for her a lot, which is quite admirable as it's only a one-shot. Well done!
A few mistakes:
'smoking a cigarette you though would be your last' you thoughT would be...
'knowing you're my Wife.' Wife shouldn't be capitalized
'"Well, your home now." I whisper in to his chest.' It's 'Well, you're home now.' And I think 'I whisper to his chest' would sound a bit better here.
Hope this review was helpful!
| Miss-You-Too chapter 1 . 9/5/2011
Ah so touching :-) i think you should have had a bit more time pass before alexander came up to her because when the plane landed it was like he was inside and next her in 10 seconds tops...but thats up to you either way i enjoyed it
| Sunstar chapter 1 . 9/3/2011
That was really sweet. :) Nice job.
| Coli Chibi chapter 1 . 7/9/2011