again, i liked the concept, but it seemed like you were just splitting up sentences and calling it a poem. i think this would do better as a paragraph. i know you probably worked hard on this, and i love your descriptions and comparisons.

this is very intriguing. I like your style.

"what skin should she bear that would be most suitable to wear in death?" it made me think of the idea that bodies are like outfits and death is an event to attend and dress up for. strange. I liked this a lot keep writing!

i liked this. the use of divine is very beautiful but i think the repetition of the phrase takes away from its initial impression. nice work.