|Reviews for straw|
| It's I who promised 10 reviews chapter 1 . 3/2/2012
I misspelled my name in the other review, hahaha.
It didn't really make sense, but I am obsessed with this line.
well, the juice that makes me
live is being sucked out and
i really do think that's all the more worse
P.S. 8 more to go!
| anachronistic chapter 1 . 7/11/2011
ehehehehehe i get what you're trying to say. this is very nice and simple and kind of sweet in that sad-ish way.
i clicked this expecting to read about the hay-like straw, though. lol oh me.
| Fragile Things chapter 1 . 7/11/2011
it made sense to me :) i liked the concept, thought the second to last stanza stood out. overall, its sweet, almost innocent in a way because ur talking about a straw but then dark emotions as well. nice job. the last stanza seemed a bit off to me only because the stanza before it was so solid and it attempted to continue a thought when i felt a period instead of the dot dot dot then "...if it happens for a" but that's just how i read it so. :)
| Penni Auros chapter 1 . 7/11/2011
Umm.. yes. This poem does make sense. I really like the metaphorical meaning of this poem, although I think you contradict what you say in the 3rd paragraph within the 4th paragraph. Maybe that adds to the whole meaning of the poem? Anyways, I really liked it. And do keep writing!