Reviews for Miranda's Story
FlagTwirler007 chapter 1 . 11/30/2011
Omigoddess! Usagi! Why the hell didn't you tell me you published it? I was randomly searching it and I found it! If you need help I'm all eyes! Love you!
TheRaven'sFeather chapter 1 . 7/16/2011
Hey there girl. First off, about your summary. Why would you say that it isn't finished if you put this as complete? Also, your summary sounded more like an author's note, maybe you should put what your stories about there. It also doesn't sound like you're that confident in your own writing.

On to the story. The grammer looked alright, except at the beginning of the second setence, you need to capitalize the first letter there. This chapter seemed very wordy if you know what I mean, so try to work on that in later chapters. I wish you would have elaborated more about the characters and their thoughts more, let me know more about them. But there's always room for that later. I wasn't a fan of the second last sentence, it took me out of the story and reminded me that this is not real, which is not good when you're reading.

Aside from those things, this story seems alright so far.

Keep writing.